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Miserable meaning or something else
as long as your there...nothing helps
insecurity, peer pressure to change
it's like I got no real treasure to gain
I hit center stage, caught up in the act
lost in the facts, never thought that contact
and touching could meet or intertwine
I become tangled in your perception, sinner divine
the pleasure was mine, you play evil and good
depending on how you get the people to look
you reveal a crook, a slant in my perspectives
but still you bring me out of my slump, perfect it
a feeling I can't explain but it's there...
regardless of my feelings or willingness to care
we share the same motives and wear the same face
maybe it's a mask inflicting truer passions to be
but all my actions to get you seem so passive to me
we kiss passionately, but become emersed in pain
it hurts with shame, everything never works the same
as the tears fall and I look into your gentle eyes
I feel like falling apart and telling you why...
telling you why I can't reveal a single moment of me
as my eyes close, so does my heart, so does my dreams




(I might write more later....idk?)

Miserable meaning or something else
as long as your there...nothing helps
insecurity, peer pressure to change
it's like I got no real treasure to gain

I become tangled in your perception, sinner divine
the pleasure was mine, you play evil and good
depending on how you get the people to look
you reveal a crook, a slant in my perspectives
but still you bring me out of my slump, perfect it

cool drop yo

you are a solid writer\

Miserable meaning or something else
as long as your there...nothing helps
insecurity, peer pressure to change
it's like I got no real treasure to gain

I Always Find It HArd Writing Real Short Bars And Have Em Flow Like This...Personally i think thats hard to do

the pleasure was mine, you play evil and good
depending on how you get the people to look
you reveal a crook, a slant in my perspectives
but still you bring me out of my slump, perfect it

Dope Flow To Me was dope on the first bar.. then a lil off in the second but at least u didnt dilute it to make it look nice...

maybe it's a mask inflicting truer passions to be
but all my actions to get you seem so passive to me

Descent...Flow Nasty But u Fall In That Dark Groove

telling you why I can't reveal a single moment of me
as my eyes close, so does my heart, so does my dreams

Nice

I Think U Do Well With Moody Pieces Like This...Kinda Ur Niche.. Dope Drop Seamless Flow Over all Good Writtens

Good start if you plan on writin more to it, u set the tone well wit what youve written so far