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Posted: **Fri Oct 06, 2006 2:59 pm**

THE NAME IS TAKTIX IM CHILLING WITH BALROG
WE DO NOTHING BUT CHILL AND RHYME CUZ THATS OUR JOB
YOU CANT MESS WITH US YOU WILL GET MOLLYWOMPED*
IM LIKE GODZILLA AND YOUR ABOUT TO BE STOMPED
WE COME WITH THE KILLER BEATS TO LET EM ALL KNOW
IF YOU WANNA STEP UP THEN BEST START A FLOW
LISTEN UP NOW LIL KID AND PLEASE BE SEATED
IMA COMPUTER VIRUS AND YOUR BOUT TO BE DELETED
YOUR GONNA LOSE SO BAD YOUR GONNA BE IN DENIAL
YOU CAN NEVER TOP THIS ITS THAT KILLER STYLE
KEEP RUNNING YOUR MOUTH JOJO BUT DONT TRIP
IMA PULL AN EMINEM MOVE AND FLIP THE SCRIPT
YOUR WEAK YOU WOULDNT BE ABLE TO TAKE MY LINES
THIS WILL TREAT YA LIKE 50 AND HIT YOU 9 TIMES
I CAN KEEP GOING I GOT MORE RHYMES THEN DR SUESS
YOU CAN TRY TO FADE MY KILLER STYLE BUT YOULL LOSE

Chorus
ITS THE KILLER STYLE (WHAT WHAT)
IT WILL DRIVE YOU WILD (YEAH WHAT)

Tell me what you think both positive and negative feed is fine my bro is gonna add another verse to this to make it complete. Pos and Neg feed is great the more the better I get.

*Mollywomped = Beaten up

Posted: **Fri Oct 06, 2006 7:39 pm**

This was great good job on the similies

Posted: **Fri Oct 06, 2006 9:08 pm**

yea, i detect some potential here, ya seem to have a good grasp of similies and content,

try to carry your rhymes longer then just 2 lines, and try to link multiple words together with the rhymes

LISTEN UP NOW LIL KID AND PLEASE BE SEATED
IMA COMPUTER VIRUS AND YOUR BOUT TO BE DELETED

^^^ you were on the right track with this bar because you had more than one syllable, but try linkin 2 words together for your rhymes, have a look around the sight and youll see examples of what i mean

Posted: **Sat Oct 07, 2006 11:05 am**

Aight thanks ima keep writing some more I will try to get my friends verse on that one thanks for feed

Posted: **Sat Oct 07, 2006 11:17 am**

Yah. Good point Precise. I couldn't word it better myself so I wont.

This was another cool bar.

YOUR GONNA LOSE SO BAD YOUR GONNA BE IN DENIAL
YOU CAN NEVER TOP THIS ITS THAT KILLER STYLE

Posted: **Sun Oct 08, 2006 2:18 am**

Thanks all I been reading all the flows on this site I can getting ideas on how stuff works or w/e and I write like non stop i actually wrote till my pencil broke rofl but yeah ima keep writing

Posted: **Sun Oct 08, 2006 2:36 am**

YOU CANT MESS WITH US YOU WILL GET MOLLYWOMPED*
IM LIKE GODZILLA AND YOUR ABOUT TO BE STOMPED

I liked this one

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