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Visionary

Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2010 5:35 am
by QwarterZ
Before Life Advanced Into The World Of Technology
A Man Was Approached By The Whole Idea Of Change
Fear Can And May Be The Point Of This Story...but...it's for you to decide

In a mist twisted into the darkness
the lights parted the skies exposing the stars
my heart is pounding 20 times a second
a essence is exposed in the far off distance
is it a spectre or is it a dream thats coming true
a voice utters in my mind "can you see what's in front of you?"
I nodded inside as if my thoughts had a watcher
replied again telling me one day the meek shall prosper
as I blink I look towards the sky where thoughts sort now
and tears fall from the heavens, that only God pours out
I heard noises in the bushes as the shifted, I'm smitten
check to see the problem at hand that God has given
the night seems to keep all types of truths revealed
the skies open again, sparkling upon these Lunar Fields
a dance commences between the wind and the plants
immoblized by a voice that said "RUN...as fast as you can"
If You See ; The World as I do...you'd understand discretion
the music of the World said Drown Me Out With Your Compact Record Collection
but I want you to hear it clearer, the pain and it's fear
it's been a magician turf war for years, explosions and tears
befell every countryside consider the years I connected
your soul and your mind for this trial, inward journey, outward expression
it's hectic, and lives don't really seem to get the entire message
they fight over problems that I feel seem no longer connected
The never ending journey was once considered knowledge of life
now that knowledge is easier to find it's become a homage of time
the wars scarring divine territories once sought for the sight
now it fought on as a site only to fall like the comets in night
where wishes replaced do it yourself attitude, now it's sick livin'
and everyone else thinks the silver platter is just a gift given
I asked "well it is...isn't it" deprived of my own emotions then
I felt a sudden tear drop and feared all I learned is Hopelessness
mistaking the case my mind shatters as if the breaking of a vase
a voice in my mind told me that "don't let these words be...taken in vein"
till the skies started to rumble and it took the image of a face
the sight itself would make you wish you was living in grace
time it split down it's face and the stars dipped round the great...
yet stormy skies, as my soul vanished and left my body without a trace
the last thing I heard.....was be prepared to be awoken
a BOOM hit as a hand reached out....Laying Track For Loco Motives



This was written for another topical...the point of this piece
was as stated in the intro...other then that...there were so many topics
I had to TRY and use everyone...either way if you could figure out where that comes in
:) thanx for noticing

Re: Visionary

Posted: Thu Aug 26, 2010 1:02 am
by FlipSide
the night seems to keep all types of truths revealed
the skies open again, sparkling upon these Lunar Fields
a dance commences between the wind and the plants
immoblized by a voice that said "RUN...as fast as you can"
If You See ; The World as I do...you'd understand discretion
the music of the World said Drown Me Out With Your Compact Record Collection
Good Imagery...They Decription is up to par here with what i come to expect from u bro...
it's hectic, and lives don't really seem to get the entire message
they fight over problems that I feel seem no longer connected
The never ending journey was once considered knowledge of life
now that knowledge is easier to find it's become a homage of time
Man THe Second Bar Is Stand Alone But I Quoted The One Before.. Cuz It Was Good But The Second Bar Is Jus Sick
where wishes replaced do it yourself attitude, now it's sick livin'
and everyone else thinks the silver platter is just a gift given
The First Line Couldve Been Worded Better But The Second Line Is An Impact Point... Gets the Message Out... Nicely Done

I Def Feel Reading Pieces Like This... it seems u get lost in the story and then some crazy shit jus comes out... i wonder if u just go in the zone and write all this or do u take ur time and work on each bar... cuz it seems in n out if u know what i mean.. but when u get into it u drop sections that are real good... Im looking foward to the topical turny if we can expect drops like this.. Ups

Re: Visionary

Posted: Thu Aug 26, 2010 1:20 am
by Quix
If You See ; The World as I do...you'd understand discretion
the music of the World said Drown Me Out With Your Compact Record Collection

Nice ^



The never ending journey was once considered knowledge of life
now that knowledge is easier to find it's become a homage of time


wHOA ... ill


good shit fam!

Re: Visionary

Posted: Thu Aug 26, 2010 9:51 am
by Phasewon
This shit was ill, the poetic steez generally doesn't appeal to me yet this was executed properly and kept my interest all the way through, the imagery and vocab were on point while at the same time managing to mix in some lyrical rhyme schemes to polish it off nice,

"The never ending journey was once considered knowledge of life
now that knowledge is easier to find it's become a homage of time
the wars scarring divine territories once sought for the sight
now it fought on as a site only to fall like the comets in night"


^the flow of that shit was just ill, as well as the multies, can't find anything negative to say, shit was executed perfectly, dope shit.