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Slept on like a muthafucker. This is sick with the flow, has solid content, and real nice with the imagery. I could see this flowing as I read it. Came together real nice fam. Props. Quit sleeping. 24 views and one reply. Wtf.

"A nuisance ya see: "thug" ain't cool as it seems//
So take that damn hat off, pull up those jeans//
Mother fucker screw being a puppet, loosen those strings//
I zoom-in all I view-is fools not doing a thing//"

"Searching but only finding excuses, shit don't make it better//
Just do it, talent & hard-work go great together//
It's obvious, a life of apathy won't help a thing//
Or mixing high anxiety with a low self esteem//
Don't put off... put on... don't look soft... look strong//
Look at me... I shook off... everything I took on//"

"Rewind to the past, keep looking for signs on the path//
Be deaf to the bullshit, but don't be blind to the facts//
These bricks won't lay themselves, so get to building//
These kids won't save themselves, so let help these children//
The history books can't be written by losers, let's make em' proud//
Stop losing position, start gaining ground//"

Sick fucking piece, man. Your flow is on point and the whole concept of this drop was great. A motivating piece with a story to be told, and you told it well.

i can quote the whole thing man ,for real..these really stuck out.

One road, too many signs, who to believe?//
If you could pursue it, what would you do w/ a dream?//

such a dope way 2 open.
immediately get u thinkg what if?

Contradicting ya'self, claiming to be an original copy//
Playing w/ fire, but too scared to sit in the hot seat//

dope man..and very true

These bricks won't lay themselves, so get to building//
These kids won't save themselves, so let help these children//

word

damn man..this was a very cool verse.felt every line man.

i'm waitin on that novel damnit.

One road, too many signs, who to believe?//
If you could pursue it, what would you do w/ a dream?//
Would you use it, n' search for the tools to succeed?//
Or would you abuse it, eventually lose it & SCREAM!!!//
Quit snoozing, who you fooling? that shit's stupid to me//
A nuisance ya see: "thug" ain't cool as it seems//
So take that damn hat off, pull up those jeans//
Mother fucker screw being a puppet, loosen those strings//

Awwwww Man This A GOod Topic Bro..... Nice Flow And Delelivery Of The Msg..

n life you gotta be different, you have any clue what that means?//

\Nice Line Bro

Know how to walk on air, but don't know how to chase a dream//

Sick

Contradicting ya'self, claiming to be an original copy//
Playing w/ fire, but too scared to sit in the hot seat//

Dope Bar Here...Really Feeling This Here

Just do it, talent & hard-work go great together//
It's obvious, a life of apathy won't help a thing//
Or mixing high anxiety with a low self esteem//
Don't put off... put on... don't look soft... look strong

Good Set Of Bars Here

If you know what I mean... time to believe in karma//
Quit acting like Louise Veronica, mother fucking pre-Madonna's//
Let the bad things go, don't ever hold a grudge//
Cuz 'grudge' is an anagram of 'Rugged' & I ain't known for luck//

Eeeeeeee Nice Shit Bro... Two Bars Are Different But Still Support Each Other Well...I Dunno It Jus Seems Good... Even Separated..But I Like Them Like This

Headaches didn't want to see me dream, just fail//
Funny fact, ya' boy r.u.g. got his g.e.d. in jail//

Ha!...Nice One Here Right After Those 2..Might Have Gone Well Together As Well But I Quoted Them Already Sooo..This One Gets Its Own

Be deaf to the bullshit, but don't be blind to the facts//

Thats Real Right There Bro...

This Was Def A Piece That Should Go As An Example Of What Good Writtens Are All About...Aside From The Flow And Word Play YOu Def Delivered A Message Here That Most People Can Relate To..Young People I Mean.. This Right Here Is A Good Motivational Piece And A Great Topic... I Seen A Few Lines Before When U Were Toying With It I Guess But As A Complete Piece This Is Probably The Most Solid Drop Ive Seen On Here Since I Started... ^^^^ Stop Sleeping...It Starts With Actions Not Words

In all honesty, I think this should be put up when awards come around. I just read it again, and Im really feeling the whole concept, along with the structure/flow/multi's/metas. Nice shit right here fam, no doubt. I feel you on the feedback tip as well. Seems to be the results for me also.

Your flow is sick on this Rugged
everything you write is coming along better and better
which is why you one of my favorite writers on here
the whole imagery you use, emits some true anger
and makes it that much more better, really strong vocab and presence
you come across more of a teacher then anything, but if you write like this
and take forever to write a book idk what's wrong with you lulz
either way this piece was nice man


Quit snoozing, who you fooling? that shit's stupid to me//
A nuisance ya see: "thug" ain't cool as it seems//
So take that damn hat off, pull up those jeans//
Mother fucker screw being a puppet, loosen those strings//
I zoom-in all I view-is fools not doing a thing//
In life you gotta be different, you have any clue what that means?//
Hands pull out pockets, just to get heads in the clouds//
Seeds keep doing dirt, just to end up dead in the ground///
Most don't know how to act, but can still make a scene//
Know how to walk on air, but don't know how to chase a dream//
Everything's a crisis (situation), a moment of bad (luck)//
Fuck all these redundancies, shit just don't add (up)//
Imma be straight forward, ya'll too scared to step back//
& think to yourselves "fuck, where's my head at?"//

^^^^^^^^^^^^that flow just reminds me of Em
I don't know why, it just comes off sickly...keep writing Rugged

I haven't been peeping the writtens at all lately.

This is an exceptional piece. Could definitely be recorded. I could hear this as I read it. Flow was near perfect. Had a lot to say and it said it well. Like Abz said, I could quote the whole thing.

One road, too many signs, who to believe?//
If you could pursue it, what would you do w/ a dream?//
Would you use it, n' search for the tools to succeed?//
Or would you abuse it, eventually lose it & SCREAM!!!//

The opening lines were excellent with an absolutely perfect flow. Really, you need to record this.

Be deaf to the bullshit, but don't be blind to the facts//

That was probably my favorite line right there.

Keep it up, man.

Amazing. I'm not gonna quote any specific parts as the whole of it is stellar, but shit man you've got something to say and a great way to say it. You can taste the effort put into these lyrics and can feel the mental energy and focus you gathered up to write this. The internal rhythm and sometimes intricate rhyme patterns make each word jump to the next almost flawlessly. As good as it stands on its own as lyrics, combine it with the right kind of beat and it would pack a major punch.

Rugged Eros wrote:Enjoy.

Stop losing position, start gaining ground//

Where Are You Headed?

werd up ill shit

Yo Yo, already commented on your laid back instro's thread, but if the comments and piece are anything to go by, you've earned respect on here bro, and for the content alone, you def have mine ... keep on keeping on cos ....

where your headed .....

is somewhere where .....

The "Truly Blessed", live ....

Peace ....

Big V

yeah, this was sick

Nice flow Eros. Nice flow indeed

"One road, too many signs, who to believe?//
If you could pursue it, what would you do w/ a dream?//
Would you use it, n' search for the tools to succeed?//
Or would you abuse it, eventually lose it & SCREAM!!!//
Quit snoozing, who you fooling? that shit's stupid to me//
A nuisance ya see: "thug" ain't cool as it seems//
So take that damn hat off, pull up those jeans//
Mother fucker stop being a puppet, loosen those strings//
I zoom-in all I view-is fools not doing a thing//
In life you gotta be different, you have any clue what that means?//"

Worth all the respect it got.

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/law-o ... 19351.html

I just read through this and this piece was well written. Your ideas flowed well from one into the next and your wordplay and multis were solid.

Let the bad things go, don't ever hold a grudge//
Cuz 'grudge' is an anagram of 'Rugged' & I ain't known for luck//
^^^That was a dope example of some of the intricate wordplay that I saw

some of you mother-fuckers will never complete a purpose//
Cuz even if ya worthless ass got "a-fix", you'd still be worth-less//
^^^Very clever

Overall, these bars summed up the main idea you were pushing in this drop in my opinion:
One road, too many signs, who to believe?//
If you could pursue it, what would you do w/ a dream?//
Would you use it, n' search for the tools to succeed?//
Or would you abuse it, eventually lose it & SCREAM!!!//
Quit snoozing, who you fooling? that shit's stupid to me//
A nuisance ya see: "thug" ain't cool as it seems//
So take that damn hat off, pull up those jeans//
Mother fucker stop being a puppet, loosen those strings//
Headaches didn't want to see me dream, just fail//
Funny fact, ya' boy r.u.g. got his g.e.d. in jail//

It was simplistic to a certain degree but very well put together. Keep droppin.

"Searching but only finding excuses, shit don't make it better//
Just do it, talent & hard-work go great together//
It's obvious, a life of apathy won't help a thing//
Or mixing high anxiety with a low self esteem//
Don't put off... put on... don't look soft... look strong//
Look at me... I shook off... everything I took on//
Be something original, let this evil fall to-US//
Keep gunning criminals, let the super hero's "Marvel-us"//
So people can say they saw what an real artist-was//
There's heroes in all of-us, feeling like a Martyr-does//"

Droppin' jewels, son! This shit was on point from top to bottom, every bar had a point and a message, no filler in this piece, flow was on point, mixing in relevant points with above par lyricism, dope shit.