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yeah im a german typer..wanna to try it in english as well..
hope its not too bad... so..enjoy..


when p.diddy calls, i might be in the biggest malls
with a billion dollars../ youre frightned of biggy smalls
cos u got abused of niggers/ as a new born kid
buddy.., now u want to know how to use a pistole..
how to introduce your sister.../
to a pimp, to get rich, with some youporn-videos/
ya know...tupac listened to my music mixtapes../
stupid bitchass/ yeah..you were a bitch in college.../
..now youre a bitch in job ...buddy..
whos spending his night..with free cocksucking.../
im rich, hes got nothing/..except for a drugpill,
and a duffbeer../buddy..it's selfdestruction/
so u have to decide../ to step thru this life../
or to commit damn suicide... buddy..

[chorus]
life is a sea..
first youre trying to see
the wide of the beach
then u dive...
bro, you're diving too deep
life is a sea

The chorus is alright, not feeling the overall direction of the verse, it's also difficult to find the rhymes, I'm sure in your accent it sounds like it rhymes so i can't say much for that however in English it doesn't...and i don't like the word "buddy" lol.. keep droppin

thx, yeah.. hmm nono the rhyme thing..is kinda habit of the best german typer
its another fresh kind to type.. sometimes..the last syllable is missing..on purpose.its kinda "arrogant-style", but no matter..i will learn the rules of english lyrics..

ur a black german?

It Seems U Need To Do A Lot Of Reading And U Are in The Best Place For It... Look At The Verses in The Writtens And Get A Hang Of THe Way Writing Is Done In English... Use Of Metaphores And Syllables... I Saw U Wrote the Way U Enunciate As In The Word Pistole..I Can See Where U Coming From Bro..Its All About Elevating Ur Skill... Jus Do Some Reading And Then GIve It Another Shot.. U Should Be Better By Next Drop

edit: uh too much blabla

thx for your feed,
yeah..the problem is..i do not even listening to german hiphop
im just a damn good typer in german..., but its all new in english
you know my vocs arent enaugh to write credibile.., so i hope
i can learn some important phrases hehe..and learn how to tell tha stories..

but i think u can see some technical skills? if u look careful you will see a 4 - 5 syllable rhyme-level.. but ofc i dont know if this rhymes are like "house-mouse" foryou..

peace buddy

Hi deaf shady.

Ahaha for real!!!

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young jobe's mom wrote:Hi deaf shady.

nope..im no fake-account
check ip or something else
im just german thats why i suck in english

I figured you on some other shit
maybe you are who knows...you got Cam in your sig
so that tells me you toying around
Cam is a dope rapper and you may be toying with his style
which is cool, but you DID come out at a bad time
I mean we seen many a biter around here...

so I'ma just say this was alright
the hook was cool, and the flow was cool
but I really can't state much more till facts is facts
peace dude

hey.. na.. iam really german
can check ip..

i dont really know what i did wrong?
so u had a lots of byters here?
yeah..but my textisnt bitet at all
its a pretty fast written freetype..

so ..im curious..so is it bad or good
and whats bad whats good? im totally new in the english scene
thats realtalk..forreal..buddy..im serious

peace bro