Hip Hop Forum

Alright lets get it started
I am genius but my flow is retarded
I built a levee and I still cant control it
A city is below,and its gonna get flooded
When it comes down,it was already busted
Know the government can never be trusted
My influence is underground, I guess I'm above it
If I see an empty shell,I just have to stuff it
Lyrics rising up your front window
Rhymes will hydrolock your Ford Pinto
If the girl is loose tell her to wear her Cinto
It was dry outside,I wet it up like Pacino
People stop dealing or you end up like Nino
Gotta stay in school and get an education
So when I'm older I can take my wife on vacation
Money is reality its not imagination
I gotta keep moving so I just ignore the stations
I went to subway and the sandwich was fly
I have to stay neutral not low and not high

I went to subway and the sandwich was fly
I have to stay neutral not low and not high

Looks like U Held out Bro...Nice Drop Tho

Thanks I still got a lot of improving to do though

Yeah, you have some feedback to give also. Thats how you usually get people to give you feed to your stuff.

This shit was pretty good for a beginners status, you could use a lot of polishing and work on multiple syllables and rhyme schemes, but not bad, stay elevating.

Super beginner. Keep practicing and elevate your rhyme schemes and flow. It wasn't like, disgusting, but it was just mediocre. I guess good for a beginner.

Listen to more rap like Big Daddy Kane or Chino XL or Big L or Eminem

Flowing was nice, IMO. I think you could do more with the multi aspect to bring your flow out just a little more, and work on the punchlines side of things. Over-all though, you bring what you have to offer to the table, and you do it well. Keep coming with the drops fam.

Thanks for the feedback everybody!

Keep writing everyday dude