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Written By: Michael Lucas(Mutual)
Performed By: Daniel Feliciano(FlipSide)

Hook
When My World Was Crashing All Around Me
All My Hope Was Gone I Was Drowning In Darkness
Barely Hanging On
Out Of The Shadows You Appearred
And Help Me Breath Again
So When It All Goes To Black I Wont Start To Fall
Cause I Can Find You In The Shadows



Verse 1
I've Been Beaten And Left Until The Feelings Inept
If I'm Seeing Correct You Know My Demons Are Prepped
To Rip Through My Heart And Leave With All The Pieces Torn
Seats With Scorned Depressed How Can I Defeat The Unborn
Shadows Grabbing At My Mind How Can I Trust My Eyes
When The People I See As Friends Just Prove I'm Blind
I'm About As Wise As Three Guys With A Gift For The Messiah
But Died When I Realised I Was Flipped Into The Fire
Burnt From The Soul Abused Gave Me Cuts Without Stitches
Enough With My Britches No Time To Be Fucking With Bitches
How'd I Get Into This Darkness In This Dammed Situation
Cant Imagine Starting Shit So How Do I Stand Instigation
Twisted Visions Of Evil Or Simply Some Sinnister Thoughts
I Administor Hordes Of Darkness Where The Ministers Sought
So Can You Comprehend Some Of The Shit I Vent Then Applaud Me
So Shut The Fuck Up Be Quiet And Get Into The Story

Hook

Verse 2
Strolling On Happy Emotions Like I Could Capture An Ocean
Manufacture A Fracture And Heal It Like A Master Of Hoping
Until Your Smitten With Your Beloved And The Power Connects
I Gave You Lemons And Was Given Back The Sourest Yet
Devoured Perplexed When Shit Was Tough I Was There For You
Prepared To Do Anything From Murder To Being Scared For You
I'd Give You Stars From The Sky To Appear In Your Grace
But You Turned You Head Away And Left Me With Tears On My Face
Now My Blood Runs Cold You Were My Fire Heating It Up
You Kept My Company But With No Love I'm Just Feeling Real Stuck
How Can I Recover Without A Heart I Cant See Into The Dark
Otherwise I Would Have Seen Your Evil Straight From The Start
If You Dont Apprecciate Me Now I'm Just Floating Above
Like An Angel I Prasied You And You Saved Me No Love
So This Is My Goodbye To You Wrapped Up In This Message
With A Fuck You TOO!! I Hope We're Feeling Connected

Hook

Verse 3
See I Dont Know What I Ever Did To Deserve This
Searchin On Earth Without A Drive A Will Nor A Purpose
See My Pain Why'd You Let It Rest On My Shoulders
My Head Is Heavy And My Fists Feel Like They Boulders
Look Through My Eyes Why Cant You See I'm Depressed
Your Not Looking Into My Mind Thats Your Visions Neglect
To The Untrained Eye Yes I Do Seem Extremely Relaxed
Really I'm Thinkin Of Knives Gore And Fiending With Macs
I Aint No Hood Gangster So Dont Get The Wrong Impression
My Confession Is Obsession Mixed Up With My Progression
Makes Think I'm Moving Forward Like A Treadmill Of Life
In The Same Situation Why'd I Never Take The Advice
When It All Goes To Black Are You There In The Night
If I Shine The Light On Your Corner Will You Brighten My Sights
I Think I Have Lost You For Good Just Dampened The Flame
But I'm Feeling No Pain, Relieved Hoping Your Feeling The Same

Who the fuck is Mike Lucas? I know the guy who produced this and his name is Mart85.

Rapping was pretty bad on this song. Your flow was all over the place and your delivery was weak, maybe its your mixing.

maybe i should say mixxed by?
And Yeah Ok..About The Rapping...Join The Turny

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I won't join because I only have an oppourtunity to record like once every 2 weeks so I would just get disqualified anyway

Get ur Freeposting Punk Asses Out The Fucking Thread ......Bitches

Ummm what

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Thats Right...IM THE FUCKING BAD GUY!!!

What the fuck are you talking about.

sentus ill wait for your once every 2 weeks to record. any day dawg. i know i aint all that, but i know i can straighten out all your side talk. pick your own shit up before you start up the quick flaw pointing.

ANYWAYS

FLIP this shit is ku dawg. i read what you was tryna spit. could of maybe re worded a couple lines so they can land better but still you got most the point across. beat is ill. sumtn i would fuck wit. like i said dawg, the message was there, jus a lil iffy on parts. i wouldnt say your shit was "all over the place" but definetly jus a lil more work. jus a LITTLE. production is gettn better. props to mutual on that. your gettn better as well homie. jus gotta keep doin it. keep on keepin on homie

Word.. Mutual Wrote This...(The Written Hot...I Just Failed On The Deliverey) And I Did Do It On A Limited Time Schedule For All Three verses To Be Done That Quick It Was Ok... I Know I Fell Off Especially After Listening To It For A Few..But It Actually Grew On me And I Might Record This The Way Its Supposed To be...I Have A Mic In My Crib And Only Get to It Bout Once A Week... but I Stand By It And Actually Feel A Little Annoyed by Flaming Asshole... NeverTheLess Thanks For The Feed Bro

thanks Loon E much appreciated and Seq i didnt think that was quick my style is quicker than this so i thought i wrote it slow but thanks for the feed no doubt

the writing was fine, flip u gotta slow down a bit, needs more pausin, u sound rushed for the most part, that all gets better with practice though

Yea Thats What Heppened To Me For Taking A Break.... I Got Some Work To Put In Tho Bro... I Will Get That Taken Care Of...This Is Also My First Time Spitting Something I Aint Write Myself.. So Its An Experience Bro..Thanks For The Peep