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Posted: Mon Aug 16, 2010 5:37 pm
by Munteskue_lol
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Re: Gee, I'm a tree
Posted: Tue Aug 17, 2010 12:32 am
by AbZ The Beast
Caged in a reality of erasin the pain
Cylinder tubes, free base, or take it straight to the brain
dope bar man...
Wallet is bare, but there's an area of houses to rob
"Bring me some 360s, and I'll give you an ounce on the spot"
i know a dealer like that..haha...
Weathered and frail from shitty cooks- bored of the shitty books
But then again, you're only here cause of course you're a shitty crook
dude thie was really dope, yer one polished writer.
great storytelling.
keep it up homie!
AbZ
Re: Gee, I'm a tree
Posted: Tue Aug 17, 2010 8:05 am
by FlipSide
Weathered and frail from shitty cooks- bored of the shitty books
But then again, you're only here cause of course you're a shitty crook
How important the city looks as you glance away from ya pages
Wanna go to court-n-this-plot SUCKS like my date of arraignment
"Booked" on Friday.. five days until i can get the booth
Ya not guilty 'til the prosecutor submits the proof
Good Usage of The Word Shitty....And The Story Telling Is Def on Point For This...
Goin insane 'cause all you wanted was a piece of the pi
Greed in your eyes? Better than leavin the streets to decide
Wait.. streets to decide?? Ain't you got a mom and a dad?
Who calmy attacked this habit that they saw as a trap?
This ominous fad you had after the ganja you stashed?
Before this fuckin drug had you in the palm of its hand?
Good Impact Section Here...Makes U Think Of The Reality Of Things That U Think Of After its Too Late
This Was OverAll A Dope Story With A Good Message... I Mean It Delivers Well And I Did Not Feel Like I Needed To Read More.. I Was Satisfied... All In All A Dope Drop With A Good Point...
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Posted: Tue Aug 17, 2010 8:15 am
by Munteskue_lol
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Re: Gee, I'm a tree
Posted: Tue Aug 17, 2010 9:03 pm
by Kuhlerblynd
Ah man, I cant believe this has so many views and so few replies. You definitely deserve more attention on this one bro. I havent seen too many people use this concept for an entire piece like you did, and you flipped it nicely. These guys already pointed out my favorite lines, but I like how you worked everything in without it seeming forced and you did really well flipping your worplday. Nice fuckin job bro. Ill be looking out for more from you in the future. Hit me up to collab sometime if you are interested. One.