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MC Believe wrote:Im Hated like a Laker Fan Inside Boston/
Champ they Lost-In,Flip Tricks Like Eric Koston/
Love Kobe but I save The Game Like D.Fisher/
MC Disser,My shot & blunt Both were Swisher/
Out for Blood Twilight Bitch Its Crimson/
A Fuck U Mission,Talking shit Like Mel Gibson/
Weak Minds Hate Me like Nazi's Hate Obama/
But Not as Much as New York Hates Osama/
I go Beyond Drama,& Fuck Yo Momma,so Hate Me/
Science Made me,like Wolverienes bones u cant Break Me/
And I do Drugs, Like Back When Steve-O Did/
Flip Out Shoot Slugs,Like a Columbine Kid/
Im Hated Like the Dentist, Death or DMV Lines/
Like a Prison Sentence, Cops Or Landmines/
Santeria I stay Sublime,Half court shot in Overtime/
Some waste Thier Time,To Blindliy hate my Rhymes/

Straight.

The dude who saved that game was Ron Artest. I can't believe I even have to say that.

MC Believe wrote:Im Hated like a Laker Fan Inside Boston/
Champ they Lost-In,Flip Tricks Like Eric Koston/
Love Kobe but I save The Game Like D.Fisher/
MC Disser,My shot & blunt Both were Swisher/
Out for Blood Twilight Bitch Its Crimson/
A Fuck U Mission,Talking shit Like Mel Gibson/
Weak Minds Hate Me like Nazi's Hate Obama/
But Not as Much as New York Hates Osama/

The whole piece could have been more elaborate. Other then that, the flow was a bit unorthodox and it was entertaining.

Good references.

its debatable who saved that game artest possibly i say fisher cuz after we got in the lead with that three boston never recovered

appreciate the feedback though

MC Believe wrote:its debatable who saved that game artest possibly i say fisher cuz after we got in the lead with that three boston never recovered

appreciate the feedback though

I'm trying not to remember. Artest did a lot going down the stretch.

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Who cares About Who Saved The Lakers.. Point is Boston Didn't Win, They Got Cheated smh

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Nice is the first thing that came to mind when I was finished with this. You had some really ill ines in there, then here and there filler came out and took away from it. At first I liked where you were going with the Laker shit and how you were flipping that also. Definitely a great way to start a piece and grab some attention. Good job bro. Ill be keeping an eye out for more in the future.

ehh, shit was decent, seems like this was just some shit you wrote in 10 minutes, the rhymes and overall structure were simplistic, although the flow was ill and you actually made relevant points in the rhymes, stay improving.

Agree with Phasewon 100 %