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Just lil sometin sometin i wrote

my peers chase cream to display it on flesh
to be kings on the scene, they're feedin on rep
never watch their next step respect is neglected
life is like chess this game aint no checkers
real thugs hold weapons to protect never serve
kinda like my cigarettes are for stress in the nerves
never to be cool only fools step on their words
without substance, hollow shells crumble to dirt
lady liberty's a bitch but her clit just hangs out
so beware, thinkin with ya dick may blow your brains out
i take the safe route plan ahead and stack my bread
pack facts into my head and pointers about success
fame is a trap, get clapped by lenses aimed at ur chest
your whole life scrapped, turned into somethin to invest
in the end its either die rich in a bar-less prison
as a fallen star forgotten, people only care for the glisten
or work towards wealth in silence without a witness
be an outsider lookin in feeding all the fishes

life is like chess this game aint no checkers

cool line

lady liberty's a bitch but her clit just hangs out
so beware, thinkin with ya dick may blow your brains out

thats dope

i feeling it man
keep buliding



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ABZ

I like what you're saying here. Nice message packaged in a nice flow. Last line was dope.

I'm actually working on a similarly themed piece myself, right now.

it was alrite in concept idea and lyrics
the flow was a lil better
some of the metas were basic
It did have a frank lucas feel and
im not saying its bad but i felt you couldve took this verse deeper

peace