Rugged Eros wrote:
My eye's aren't shut, but I still see the darkness//
Only "
perks" I get in life are outta other people's garbage//
[Ok, that's a good concept, but not a great punch]
Fuck Iron Man, it's '
Iron-E', geeking out, speeding down the highway//
Laughing cuz ya'll thinking bout mondays while I'm dreaming bout fridays//
Taking it slow, cuz everyone else is headed nowhere fast//
It's not that I don't see them falling, it's that I DON'T CARE, DAMN!//
[I'm not feeling this. I'm still waiting for that impact.]
They were never there for me, notebook's were my best friend//
When it came to peers, I pressed talk, but they pressed end//
Then saw me w/ my head down, asked me what I've been up to//
Gave em' a BIG FUCK YOU, "Damn Ruggz look at Karma, bitch loves you"//
[Excellent phrasing]
My candle will forever burn, n' don't you bitch asses forget it//
Cuz if I ever try my hardest, I'll be on the cover of Wax Poetics//
Stay shallow, never worry about getting in too deep//
Under the surface of my skin is a deep
blue sea//
Green w/ envy... I'll paint this town
red just so there's no gray matter//
You know? ... that has a nice ring to it, what you say Saturn?//
[Ill]
I'm "
anti-christ", fell from grace, thinking "god you let me plummet"//
Sinking into this bottle of devil's water, drinking on an empty stomach//
[There we go, that's another sick one]
Imma firestarter, a
prodigy, don't gotta
mob deep to raise
havoc//
I don't have to change myself in order to break habits//
[The first bar was great]
I'm solo dolo, too many cats gettin' their rat on//
Telling made up stories, dreamers getting their camp on//
Second hand bullshit, effects my health//
For real, It's black christmas w/ how I '
present' myself//
[Cool wordplay, not the most self evident meta, but another highlight from this piece]
I write for fun, going for Denver's top seed//
I'm like the sun, you can never off me//
[No!]
You can't hold a candle to me, bitch I flame on wax//
Fuck a record label, I'm highly "
trained" but don't make "
Con tracks"//
[Con wordplay never works at all]
A day walker turned night crawler, left handed living right minded//
Always ahead of the curve, never getting blind sided//
[cool]
Who want's to pay for my meds? Come lay in my bed?//
Cuz every time I'm alone, I try to brain storm, but it rain in my head//
[Rains in my head or its grammatically incorrect and doesn't interest me]
Going off like TNT, watch Imma get murdered probably//
But before the curtain's call me, Imma air out this dirty laundry//
I'm the only one in this dark tunnel who found light//
I got originality, all you 2pac's = "
sound bites"//
[Think you could have came up with a better punch]
This shit is as real as ever, being a leader's got me feeling better//
Imma save this money for a rainy day, call me a bill collector//
Destiny's gonna "
come for me", especially if I go down on her//
I love this game, the art of
spitting makes my mouth
water//
Got the world weighing on me, but my shoulder's never break//
Gonna "
raise my capital", tired of being a lower letter case//
No more trying to make a living, now it’s time to make a killing//
Bury some seeds, sprinkle some water n' raise my children//
Send out a message, these children's mind's are hungry//
Don't count the seconds, cuz you always think time is money//
Imma dream w/ my eyes open, remember the past, let the dead walk//
Be myself, so quiet in this writers mind, you can hear a "pen" drop//
[Great closer]
