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Dirt off your shoulder remix

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To Jay-Z's Dirt off Your Shoulder Instrumental

Verse 1:
It's been conversated, debated who's the most amazing, the greatest
the illest lyrical master, crafting brilliance on stages
who's rhyme-scheme's the supremest, revealing skills unequated
who with a pen and some pages presents stupendous creations
I'm not here to cause trouble, but it's important I mention
I'm all the above and more, in my humble opinion
I'm raising roofs with my wisdom, engraving youth with my vision
cuz see the truth's in my writtens and the proof's in my spittin'
undisputed ascension to the top of the top
known across continents, people flock when I drop
My time is at hand, I got a pocket of clocks
and my rhyme's in demand so I'm not gonna stop

Verse 2:
I been writing for months, make that a year and a day
I can't emphasize enough the things my peers had to say
envy clearly conveyed, their face betrayed what they craved
it's like they pray for a way to see me lay in my grave
but like, 14 days and nights, they're too weak (two week)
I got 14 ways to fight, like Jet Li
if I got 14 haters tonight, I'll choose three
cuz 14 wakes is a lot, I need sleep
it takes a lot of energy, defending titles I've claimed
but they keep sending me lames, and so my rival's my brain
freshmen are leagues under me, scared by hooks I deliver
so i only see competition when I look in the mirror
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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Re: Dirt off your shoulder remix

Post by K KiLLaH »

thats fire flowed perfect record that asap
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Re: Dirt off your shoulder remix

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I didnt play the beat while i read it but i know how that beat goes and it sounded pretty close with the flow

Lyrically
Had a few coo metaphors i felt the first verse flowed better then the 2nd

Had some sick vocab in a few parts
some parts had complexity to em but i feel u couldve took some of these ideas farther

All in all Coo Read
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Re: Dirt off your shoulder remix

Post by Kau the Lion »

Not bad. Felt like it started of strong then fell a bit as it went on. Last line was dope, though.
so i only see competition when I look in the mirror
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Re: Dirt off your shoulder remix

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Preciate thee feedback
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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Re: Dirt off your shoulder remix

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ayy i wanna collab with u, r u down?
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