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It's like...I'm limited to gain, no one could emit the pain
they say I'm indignant n strange, bettin' it all like flippin' his change
it's like sayin' I don't feel it comin', like vicodin slippin' in his veins
see I ain't the type to stare up at the sky, wishin' it'd change
if you flippin' the script, diggin' for pain, and spittin' that flame
I could easily take your spot if that thought was limited to pain
I'm the last clock, drippin' it's grain, watchin' it fall into lower levels
till it reaches that last spot, I'm flippin' its frame, as it goes central
why keep wasting my time to say something that's so general?
it's like saying fuck the United States, and all the censors out
or like trying to spell Illuminati backwards then checkin' the route
when it hits your URL, then you realize what it's all been about
I don't have to re-Pete Doctor, to know they tried to suspend your house
see the guidance was always greed from the start of childhood
so they say you stupid for tryna profile looks into compiled books
it don't take a genius to realize the ending is close to Lil' Red Riding Hood
so keep the tithing crooks, treat it like bad steering peep how my alignment looks

this wasnt bad the flow was solid a couple places a lil off but you may spit it differently the multies were nice all the way through, and the inner rhymes were worked well man overall this wasnt a bad piece coulda been touched up more but i enjoyed it, keep this comin man

so keep the tithing crooks, treat it like bad steering peep how my alignment looks

Nice closer. Feelin' that. Decent multies in this pice.

it's like sayin' I don't feel it comin', like vicodin slippin' in his veins
see I ain't the type to stare up at the sky, wishin' it'd change
if you flippin' the script, diggin' for pain, and spittin' that flame
I could easily take your spot if that thought was limited to pain

I think this had madd sence behind it and was worded well... flow ur usual smooth type

see the guidance was always greed from the start of childhood
so they say you stupid for tryna profile looks into compiled books
it don't take a genius to realize the ending is close to Lil' Red Riding Hood
so keep the tithing crooks, treat it like bad steering peep how my alignment looks

Descent again with the flow and had some nice word play in there....

I feel like this is one of ur standard drops.. not saying nothing bad...its good... good flow good meaning good wordplay.... but similar in style to what u usually write... again tho... id like to get to a level where everything i write flows well like that... good stuff shun