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a bombardment of blows from a heartless foe
a true artist knows u gotta sharpen the flow
u gotta attack tactically craft a masterpiece
mathematically countin on fools equals catastrophy
Gods on my side, so to battle me is blasphomy
how they spit such bullshit honestly baffles me
i drool when im fast asleep and rack up more casualties
my mental faculties are takin a break in the lounge
but when theyre done playin theyll get back to paintin u clowns
goin stroke for stroke, nope,... just put the brush down....
hop in ur lil golf cart while u can still putt putt around
take u clubbin with a 9 iron, in the rough, only one of ur balls will be found
the rest will be on the green in that lil pole huggin hole in the ground

Decently written. I think you need to try to be more direct with your punches though. The flow is nice and your not rhyming simple words, so that's always good. Either way, keep droppin' & elevatin.

alright ill work on it more thank u much mayne

This piece didn't really have punches
as you were told, the whole concept of a punch is to have a set up
and then drop something to follow it, it's like telling a joke
kinda like Knock Knock I guess you could say?

either way this piece was sick for the multi's
some of the words were mispelt, but if your spitting it
it's dope, either way you had a nice punchless drop man

= )

Word. Not much for setups. The rhyming wasn't horrible, though it was standard.

"but when theyre done playin theyll get back to paintin u clowns
goin stroke for stroke, nope,... just put the brush down....

The best punch by far.

You've got potential. Keep writing.

a bombardment of blows from a heartless foe
a true artist knows u gotta sharpen the flow

ok.


u gotta attack tactically craft a masterpiece
mathematically countin on fools equals catastrophy

cool flow.

Gods on my side, so to battle me is blasphomy
how they spit such bullshit honestly baffles me

ok...

i drool when im fast asleep and rack up more casualties
my mental faculties are takin a break in the lounge

Cool

but when theyre done playin theyll get back to paintin u clowns
goin stroke for stroke, nope,... just put the brush down....

lol. ok

hop in ur lil golf cart while u can still putt putt around
take u clubbin with a 9 iron, in the rough, only one of ur balls will be found
the rest will be on the green in that lil pole huggin hole in the ground


Best bar of the drop.


this was more Simple 2 me, I Think you could of done better on your part when spicing the shit up, but Nonetheless it was Decent.

cool shit, Keep dropping

u gotta attack tactically craft a masterpiece
mathematically countin on fools equals catastrophy

This wouldve been sooo fucking sick if worded a lil better

hop in ur lil golf cart while u can still putt putt around
take u clubbin with a 9 iron, in the rough, only one of ur balls will be found

U got descent flow.. but theres some filler in there.. Punches werent landing well tho.. plex pointed the better of ur attempts.. tho u got some imagery and style dude.. Nice drop