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For A.E.S. (The Truth)

Posted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 12:42 pm
by Lawgix
as darkness distills upon the empty treaches
another soldier stands alone, him and his deadly weapon
his minds resurecting for the art war and genocide
as another part of his half leans more for suicide
he ignores the other half cause its pure, hatred and evil
cause the other halfs a demon
in the form of a man standing at a broken church steple
that couldn't find his way in life so he picks on the better people
cause of an accident he had, his mind was left broken and crippled
but yet, another person in his life is the culpirt
a demon dressed in womens clothing to impare this soldiers soul
so he lets nothing stand in his way of making the demon happy
even though his life is filled with a full-of-life hearts that shes tattering
on his left shoulder shows the affection that he has for the demon
he even sacrificed a peice of himself in her, his semen
the male demon summons upon the dark force
of the other side of police work to show no remorse
against the soldier suffocating him with wicked force
so of course i'm talkin about the LCSD
cause the Lincoln County Deputy was siding
with the other demon that was beckoning
causing hell in the soldiers life and the little town he was protecting
so one fateful night, a foggy January
him and the demon got in a fight,
only because the soldier did was he did best
and that my friends was caring
she left him to carry a heavy burden upon himself
either she leave him, or he sentences death inflicted by himself
she went to tuck the soldiers angels in, singing a beautiful lullaby
but all along the female demon had a wicked alliby
the soldier found himself in a dark, corroded place
with his 44 mag staring back at him in his face
with a gentle motion the loud sounds filled the atmosphere
and the only thing u were left to hear was the angels crying tears,
but the demon was satisfied with the deed she committed
now the devil will glorify cause the soldiers pain was wrongly inflicted
i still remember the funeral for the soldier that was left in the attic
as both of the demons stood there, gazing ammusingly at his casket
now his spirit fills the air over the towns that he left
and if anybody persues wrong doing
its the demons soul that he'll see to death
so this poem goes out to the two demons that still roam the earth
when God and Aaron find both of you, rest assured u'll be decaying in a hearse

lots of emotions with that one
true story
don't beleive me ask me
i'll tell u
peace

Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 12:53 am
by Borat
well...first off i would like to say..."wow", correct i can feel the emotion, i love the whole angel and devil on the shoulder nice working with that...most the time its overplayed or not played enough but this was good..."him and demon got in a fight,
only because the soldier did was he did best
and that my friends was caring
she left him to carry a heavy burden upon himself
either she leave him, or he sentences death inflicted by himself
she went to tuck the soldiers angels in, singing a beautiful lullaby
but all along the female demon had a wicked alliby"
i love that haha Well overall great Piece keep up the good work

Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 4:14 am
by Lawgix
thanx dawg, appreciate it tons and tons, it came from the heart, and it means alot to me cause its the cold honest truth tho i didn't use any names except for his, cause he deserved it. fuck all them other un-named bitches but thanx for the feedback man much appreciated

Posted: Fri Oct 06, 2006 10:17 am
by complexity
Yah. This was creative man. Big ups on this!

Posted: Fri Oct 06, 2006 10:51 pm
by Lawgix
thanx alot. i appreciate it alot. took alot of effort for me to pull somethin like this off. but thanx for the feedback man

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 8:43 am
by Lawgix
i'd still like to see some more feed on this poem...

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 9:37 am
by -TraMaTiK-
on his left shoulder shows the affection that he has for the demon
he even sacrificed a peice of himself in her, his semen

krazy gud^ lol overall this piece iz bangin homie 4 real...and when u get time get @ me on msn i wanna go over sum audio tips..but ur piece was fire...i like that bar especially tho that i pointed out..nice job -1-

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 11:49 am
by Haz
so one fateful night, a foggy January
him and the demon got in a fight,
only because the soldier did was he did best
and that my friends was caring
she left him to carry a heavy burden upon himself
either she leave him, or he sentences death inflicted by himself

Good Shit Emotion Felt .. Do U

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 4:57 pm
by Lawgix
thanx alot for the feed guys... yeah man hit me up netime u want Tramatik... i'll help u...

Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 3:24 pm
by Lawgix
more feed would be appreciated...

Posted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 9:05 am
by Lawgix
i'd like to get other peoples opinions on this... just tell me what ya think... like it... dislike it... it'll help me to elevate myself in poetry

Posted: Sat Feb 10, 2007 4:55 am
by ~*Blitz*~
That was super long! I think you've shown me this before - Its deep and got alot of meaning to you.. and you have such an imagination lol! As I've told you before I like the piece alot - Good Job Philly!

Posted: Sat Feb 10, 2007 7:37 pm
by Lawgix
ty hun!!!! means alot

Posted: Sat Feb 10, 2007 8:35 pm
by Spoof
wow this was mad dope drop, very deep and... wow :D I loved the whole poem but here's just few of my fav lines:

she went to tuck the soldiers angels in, singing a beautiful lullaby
but all along the female demon had a wicked alliby
the soldier found himself in a dark, corroded place
with his 44 mag staring back at him in his face

but the demon was satisfied with the deed she committed
now the devil will glorify cause the soldiers pain was wrongly inflicted
i still remember the funeral for the soldier that was left in the attic
as both of the demons stood there, gazing ammusingly at his casket

PROPS!

Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 9:31 am
by Lawgix
thank you very much spoof took a while to write this... thanx so much i love this poem alot one of my favs