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If beauty could be described, how would I be describing you
see.. you make men maniacal, you make women rely on you
people, they become suicidal, especially if denied by you
see lust aligned with you, then both left love divided, truth...
on your reflections hide from view, but you pinpoint that....
don't you? see what I tried to do is I tried to enjoy that
you could avoid facts, you a bloodsucker stuck in a void trance
get it? well if not, then clarify the injustice you brought with pain
see you model'd dames to be a man's hope and thoughtful gain
your response? it's a shame, see I used to think such awful thangs
like if I broke the skin, beauty would grow out, shoulda thought again
see you manipulated the poor, the high? you was rock cocaine
the beauty, untouchable, like when a underdog never lost the game
or maybe it was like the last sprout, that spread across the plain
maybe I'm ahead of myself, see you sprouted them spots of pain
drippin' from the eyes, the brush to the artists thoughts with paint
scribbling, see your etched in my skin, so when the apostles rain
I won't get atop the rays, I'll be stuck on earth, dreaming of you
you been teasing the youth, they throw up everything appeasing to you
see you ain't leaving the tube, you choked up every being you knew
you told man to take the apple, and women gotta face being of you
a piece of the fruit that help'd see deception like the evenings of June
covered in the rain clouds, how could any of us stay believing in you
if the devil wears prada, and you wear the mask of decievements and truth
how could anything exist.....yet it seems like everything persists
the pressures on like a ring to the wrist, cut, but, the singing consists
of sirens screaming to the heavens, strumming lute's streaming it's lips
while it sucks the nectar from earth, and spews it to the sky like heathens...
or demons of the netherworlds, where love never travelled or survived
I'm waiting for you to decay.....fall apart, as the feeling scatters from mind
you can't battle with time.....your breaking apart, the skin can't handle it's lies
the mirror is your worst foe................

Props for a dope concept.

people, they become suicidal, especially if denied by you
see lust aligned with you, then both left love divided, truth...

get it? well if not, then clarify the injustice you brought with pain
see you model'd dames to be a man's hope and thoughtful gain
your response? it's a shame, see I used to think such awful thangs
like if I broke the skin, beauty would grow out, shoulda thought again
see you manipulated the poor, the high? you was rock cocaine

This was The Dope.. Or The Crack Cocaine...Deep Shit.. Nice Wording And Great Flow

you been teasing the youth, they throw up everything appeasing to you
see you ain't leaving the tube, you choked up every being you knew
you told man to take the apple, and women gotta face being of you
a piece of the fruit that help'd see deception like the evenings of June
covered in the rain clouds, how could any of us stay believing in you
if the devil wears prada, and you wear the mask of decievements and truth

Once More This Was The Shit... u Say this love or sweet shit is a block.. but im seeing some real dope shit in here

the pressures on like a ring to the wrist, cut, but, the singing consists
of sirens screaming to the heavens, strumming lute's streaming it's lips
while it sucks the nectar from earth, and spews it to the sky like heathens

\One More Gain This Was Good

I would leave more extensive feed but my page is acting funny... bouncing me to the top so i cant really c what im typing.. overall i like the deep inlays with the sick flow.. its more of a way of being poetic in ur verses... i like this style from u.. no homo

Good job man you do more topics like this. You really shined in this

8/10

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i love this kinda stuff deep insightful staying on topic the wordplay vocab multis it was great keep it up

wouldn't a whisper leave suspense tho' 0_0

lol ^

nah this shit was real i enjoyed the message which you deliver consisantly

but the flow did fall of in many locations just to many syllables but over all

i liked it agree on about 7.5/10

good drop Qwarterz

Feed me....

I actually picture u talking in master shake's voice now.

Anyway this was pretty nice it was cool how it all seemed so literal at the start then the perspective kinda shifted a few times before the end. The similes and imagery were the strongest points with multis a close second, however I noticed a couple were forced or maybe that's just my opinion. I don't really care cause as a whole it was quite a thought provoking read.

your response? it's a shame, see I used to think such awful thangs
like if I broke the skin, beauty would grow out, shoulda thought again

^Fav bar.

yeah this drop was pretty nice bro. only qualm is i feel the lyrics were a bit stronger in the beginning and faded toward the middle somewhere but then came back. flow was consistent. had some quotable's in there too. keep doin ya thing man.

word....that's how most of my pieces are.....well some...
well...a small portion...well....you know...

-- Thu Sep 08, 2011 11:13 pm --

for the heathens

Yo man, I think you snapped all the way through the damn thing, to be completely honest. Some bars seemed stretched, but the content more than compensated for that. Dope shit.