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Rap Monger

Posted: Fri Jul 09, 2010 11:25 am
by Audible Thought
The caliber of my vernacular impacts like a .50
shatters your anatomy into a scene that is grizzly
fumes make ya dizzy from this poisonous delivery
you need the devil's army to have a chance of gettin rid of me
my bars are like artillery they targeting the industry
strike with vengeance they will suffer all the penalties
my ideology, make you think hitler is in heaven
fill the world with malcom x's, who carry mac elevens
my pack attack in nano seconds wrap it up in several lessons
telekinetic i decapitate, if you even think to question
the wrath of my power, a hurricane of acid showers
devour rappers with shit that straight up blow up towers
y'all a bunch of cowards pickin flowers for some bitch
ill burn the fucking field to show im at a feverous pitch
obsessive compulsive feel the need to be ripping a beat
every second of every hour of every day of every week

Re: Rap Monger

Posted: Fri Jul 09, 2010 11:45 am
by QwarterZ
This was purdy tight man, your flow is on point
your multi's is also on point, a lot of this stuck out to me
very nice drop man, I'd add more but I rather let everyone else pick it apart
I'm too in hurry to be saying these lines are what I liked right now
even tho' I'm explainin' it....nevermind

the wrath of my power, a hurricane of acid showers
devour rappers with shit that straight up blow up towers
y'all a bunch of cowards pickin flowers for some bitch
ill burn the fucking field to show im at a feverous pitch
^^^^^^^^

that last line woulda been SICK if worded better
purdy good tho', no real concept just a lot of flow n shit
and I don't mind that, keep writing bruh

Re: Rap Monger

Posted: Fri Jul 09, 2010 4:15 pm
by Soulo
Like this piece, but the first half dominated. However, the last bar was dope, so a great compensation.

Re: Rap Monger

Posted: Sat Jul 10, 2010 5:51 am
by Duke
Best line: "obsessive compulsive feel the need to be ripping a beat
every second of every hour of every day of every week"

Second best: "my ideology, make you think hitler is in heaven
fill the world with malcom x's, who carry mac elevens"

It sounds like a Wu style guest spot. Not too bad.

Re: Rap Monger

Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 5:21 am
by Haz
fill the world with malcom x's, who carry mac elevens
my pack attack in nano seconds wrap it up in several lessons
telekinetic i decapitate, if you even think to question
the wrath of my power, a hurricane of acid showers


Stood Out.


Overall this was good, keep It Up

Re: Rap Monger

Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 6:55 am
by NoVeL
Critical Line
fumes make ya dizzy from this poisonous delivery
you need the devil's army to have a chance of gettin rid of me
my bars are like artillery they targeting the industry
strike with vengeance they will suffer all the penalties
my ideology, make you think hitler is in heaven
fill the world with malcom x's, who carry mac elevens
my pack attack in nano seconds wrap it up in several lessons