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Demon Death Dealer

Posted: Thu Jul 08, 2010 10:09 am
by FlipSide
Weathered the storm now the tracks gone from where i came from
Tho the same song beat's my ear drums my memories fantom
Never saw the flaws from this angle
Life was but a taste in example woke a beast ta feed with a sample
Word my growth's ample.. my past a castle of horrors i trample
My soul is rotten escapin the devils gallows with cheeks hollow
My thirst grows when deceits swallowed so im crackin a bottle
Changing the tempo my sense swole till popped like a pimple
Its all in the mental so i vent flows thru the end of a pencil
Just ta breathe again the world pretends..n in faith depends
To hol Da shit, like a diaper.. never needing a change in filth
Situations rasher than the cause of its tense.. all this dark matter
Never mattered to them.. the need for heat will swallow the sun
Cast a shadow of the coldest return ta lift ahes outta they urns
I got what i earned for holding stern in its evil concern
A tool of mischief for its regal welcome back to the earth
So now im giving it back like wings is replacin the horns
Battle Ax Jumpin off of My Horse My Games Death,
They Calling me war, After the Saints Left..

Re: Demon Death Dealer

Posted: Thu Jul 08, 2010 3:04 pm
by NoVeL
Life was but a taste in example woke a beast ta feed with a sample
Word my growth's ample.. my past a castle of horrors i trample
My soul is rotten escapin the devils gallows with cheeks hollow
My thirst grows when deceits swallowed so im crackin a bottle
Best Imagery.. Great Drop Shun. Now Tell em Make Me A Sammich!!

Lol

Re: Demon Death Dealer

Posted: Fri Jul 09, 2010 10:18 am
by QwarterZ
I'm glad to see your growth Flip, you got some nicer vocab these days
which is good, I'm diggin' the emotion behind this, the flow was bumpy at start
but it's all good, got some nice imagery in this aswell, got a sick vibe
very smooth, good drop man!!!!!!!!!

Re: Demon Death Dealer

Posted: Wed Jul 14, 2010 5:33 am
by Borat
This piece is crazy man... for real, it has all types of styles and shit in it... like you can go with an underflow of poetry mixed with some dope ass imagry then put some clean ass rhymes in it. And at times I could not catch the flow... I write like that tho, I bet this sounds purdy dope coming out of your mouth. Audio would be nice. Keep 'em comin man you gettin better and better

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Re: Demon Death Dealer

Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 5:16 am
by Haz
Weathered the storm now the tracks gone from where i came from
Tho the same song beat's my ear drums my memories fantom
Never saw the flaws from this angle
Life was but a taste in example woke a beast ta feed with a sample

This was cool.

Word my growth's ample.. my past a castle of horrors i trample
My soul is rotten escapin the devils gallows with cheeks hollow
My thirst grows when deceits swallowed so im crackin a bottle
Changing the tempo my sense swole till popped like a pimple
Its all in the mental so i vent flows thru the end of a pencil

Good.

Just ta breathe again the world pretends..n in faith depends
To hol Da shit, like a diaper.. never needing a change in filth

could go further then diaper.

Situations rasher than the cause of its tense.. all this dark matter
Never mattered to them.. the need for heat will swallow the sun
Cast a shadow of the coldest return ta lift ahes outta they urns
I got what i earned for holding stern in its evil concern
A tool of mischief for its regal welcome back to the earth
So now im giving it back like wings is replacin the horns
Battle Ax Jumpin off of My Horse My Games Death,
They Calling me war, After the Saints Left..


Cool.


Def got better. I Think you could work on ya meta's get um deep but snappy other then That do u. Good drop Keep at it