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You're a slow slug lookin' like bug, Rug' do "Like Mike" and "Beat It"
Kill you! neeh i don't need it, look at your avy', i've already did it!

Get it! i'm 0-2 but i'm above you son, i'll take you one on one
Cuz you're layin' on the ground, while i'm jumpin over the sun!


I'm not takin' you serious boy, you're thru'
You're name is a condom, i'm just fuckin' with you

I'm ending this now, consider it a favor
A yeah! Did your name came with a flavor?





Like Mike - the movie
There actually is a condom with your name =)) google it...

Punches - Rugged Eros ( His were structured better, more creative, and more humorous. )
Multis - Rugged Eros ( Wasn't too much to judge here, but Rugged did have a couple. )
Flow - Rugged Eros ( His bars rolled off the tongue easier.. )
Personals - Rugged Eros
Wordplay - Rugged Eros
Nameplay - Rugged Eros
Originality - Rugged Eros

OK, so it was a cat sweep, but Shady, I'd like to give you some advice that may help you. Your structure needs work. Situate your punchline first, then work off that. If you say your punchline out loud and it doesn't sound right, then restructure it so it does, then work off that.

My vote is goin' to Rugged Eros

Im not gonna break it down ...cuz on all cats rugg took this..Hands down..

Sick Double entendre with the cotton mouth line. You cant spit/salivate when you have cotton mount when you smoke, plus you were referring to the rapper who can't rap very well. You're a G, dogg.


Cat sweep for rugged unless my lack of posts prevents me from closing a battle that's obviously gonna end up a KO

it's okay! only complain i have about the votes is that... there not constructive... nobody tells me what i've done wrong... and it's a little bit hard to change if i don't know what i'm doin' wrong... when i write them down they sound good... but then i read them i edit them and try to make them as good as possible... maybe the problem is that i'm not a native english speaker, cuz donno to me and other's that i've showed the battle it wasn't such drastic los'.

thanks 4 the opportunity! good one rugg'

close and update....


p.s. Another rematch after i figure out my style.... one day i'll beat you... and everyone that beat me here )

pretty one sided.

V/ Rugged


LOTB

PUSSY you are what you eat, I'll "tear-a-wrist" with those corny sand-scripts//
Shady's just Suburban Noize, call you "cottonmouth king" cuz you "can't spit"//
GGGGGGGGGGGGGEEEEEEEEZZZZZZ ....us


Shady you need to be more direct with your punches. go in with some personals and/or nameplay. be creative and make your bars a little more complex.

Indefinite wrote:Sick Double entendre with the cotton mouth line. You cant spit/salivate when you have cotton mount when you smoke, plus you were referring to the rapper who can't rap very well. You're a G, dogg.


Cat sweep for rugged unless my lack of posts prevents me from closing a battle that's obviously gonna end up a KO

before i accept this as a vote it needs to be broke down...

-- Tue Jul 13, 2010 1:13 pm --

-EDIS-PILF- wrote:Im not gonna break it down ...cuz on all cats rugg took this..Hands down..

before i accept this as a vote it needs to be broke down...

Rugged Eros wrote:I just realized I was high and fucked up the multi's in the second bar. It should be --


There's no shade in the fire, you flaming fag it's over//
Only way this shady will be a "culture shock" is if he takes a bath with toasters//

Ain't no multis in that wack ass line.........your verse wasn't good, it was just less bad than his

Vote= rugged....

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How is that not a multi? You're a fucking idiot, crimson. It rhymes, multiple times, thus being a fucking multiple rhyme scheme. I swear people are getting dumber..

-- Wed Jul 14, 2010 12:37 pm --

Multis- rugged
Flow- shady
wordplay- rugged
creativity- both were interesting and kinda funny, but rugged
Vote- rugged

ight shady, you can make me laugh, but you need to up your lyricism. You're kinda like a slightly ridiculous comedian, not a rapper.

You have PLENTY of time to write, so take your time

I can honestly free off the top better than you write, no offense intended, but for real. I just think you're rushin your shit. Incorporate multis, vocabulary, and name play into your verses. I feel like you just look a couple things about someone's name up on google, make fun of it, and make some jokes aWbout dicks or cum.

You kinda just rap like this
I'm out of this world, I''ll take you off the atlas quick
And tap your bitch, 'cause I'm fast and quick
Who just fucked you up? Oh that's my dick

Except without the multis. UP YOUR GAME

and maybe battlin ain't your thing, even if if eminem did it. I know you look up to him; he's an amazing rapper, but not everyone is the same. Look at yourself and ask if this is the shit you really wanna be spendin your time on. You're not great right now, but I see possibilities for potential in you. Try writing some poetry or written drops before just callin tons of ppl out