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Gather my rhyme book and sell it to writers/
My lines swellin in size, call it elephantitis/
You can tell its a crisis, go and alert Barack/
Think you deserve some props but all of yer verses flop/
Dispersin shots, you bitches could never spit this dope/
You can wish and hope, even if you swished with liquid soap/
You wouldn't be as clean as this, new breed of geniuses/
yer a piece of shit, a soup kitchen wouldn't feed yer scripts/
We plead the fifth, yer life is hard, you might get scarred/
But I'm the bouncer warning you not to fight in bars/
The cypher star, still the dumb kids test my skill with punches/
But I'm so ill its like my tongue is filled with fungus/
Killin hundreds like my drops are laced with a toxic agent/
Got the glock cocked and aimed, ready for a pop sensation/
Its not a proclamation, its my sole mission in life/
To spit into mics til you lose yer whole volition to write/

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I usually don't comment on people's written work because the way I see it, who the fuck am I to criticize someone's personal work.. but I just wanted to say I liked it. It was easy ta read and I thought it had good multis and flowed well.

"Gather my rhyme book and sell it to writers/
My lines swellin in size, call it elephantitis/"

Best bar of the whole piece

Again as usually it flowed near perfection and the content was great,
I feel though like you really shine when you put emotions into your writtens instead of just raw lyricalness (is that a word?)

nothing more to say

8.5/10

Gather my rhyme book and sell it to writers/
My lines swellin in size, call it elephantitis/

This was funny

Dispersin shots, you bitches could never spit this dope/
You can wish and hope, even if you swished with liquid soap/

I dont see how dope and soap go together...but it flowed well

You wouldn't be as clean as this, new breed of geniuses/
yer a piece of shit, a soup kitchen wouldn't feed yer scripts/

Thats a nice punch

We plead the fifth, yer life is hard, you might get scarred/
But I'm the bouncer warning you not to fight in bars/
The cypher star, still the dumb kids test my skill with punches/
But I'm so ill its like my tongue is filled with fungus/

Nice word play.. lol and nice metaphor as well ...

Over all this was an usual drop by u... good punches and metas as well as word play... tho wtf....is confuzzled

confused n puzzled..

Str8 fyre

Someone translate what this kid is sayin cuz its got me confuzzled. And you may think you know what talent is, but look at my feedback on my drops and compare em to yours. I'm my own harshest critic, I don't think my shit it is dope. I just say I am because motherfuckas tell me I am.

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Jobe u aint nowhere near gonzos level duuude

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Lol 'preciate the breakdown, Rugged. Just some shit I threw together quick, I usually don't put too much thought behind pieces like these, just basically staying active with new material. And yes, the bar line was intended in the pub and rhyme bar fashion as you picked up on. I've got other story verses you are more than welcome to dig up and bump lol. Oh and props to whoever deleted Jobe's retarded comment. Preciate the feed yall!

The cypher star, still the dumb kids test my skill with punches/
But I'm so ill its like my tongue is filled with fungus/
Killin hundreds like my drops are laced with a toxic agent/
Got the glock cocked and aimed, ready for a pop sensation/

This Was Excellent Ruck..You Sure Captivated On Your Multies & Wordplay