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Waitin 4 U

Post by Kurse »

So...we all know I can be brutally honest when it comes to my music. From Hustle music...to diss tracks...I've done a little bit of everything. But a few weeks back, me and my girl were at work bullshittin, and my music was the topic of the moment. She brought up the idea that it'd be nice to do sumthin for the ladies, but make it more romantic and a little less sexual (as I've had a habit of doin in the past lol)! So I told Kim I'd write such a song.
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ok.. the beat is tight, its a beat that you can bump to but you can speak something serious... The lyrics were good.. compared to your other stuff you slowed it way down, but it just shows you are versitile becuz this was a good track.. The hook i wasnt really feeling.. a female vocal would sound legit on this... or like a softer boy band vocal if thats what im tryig to say... other then that its a good track..
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Actually I was hoping that Loonie's girl Vixen would do the hook, but I have yet to hear back on that idea. But definitely...I agree (I'm not 100% satisfied with the hook myself)...but a chick would definitely make it complete and more rounded. Thanks for the feed.
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Well wusup dawg lemme know what u need amigo u know i got ya. Pm me about it or get my number from hkx and we can chop it up about the subject

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This was actually purdy nice
idk what different is by your standards
but this was purdy smooth
I like the vibe, keep it up man I'll peep more later
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i saw you mentioning this shit on ya facebook n ish lol, the beat was very dope i liked that shit from the start, the lyrics were dope heartfelt kind of shit really gave an impact at conveyed that message you were trying to deliver, the hook, sang by a girl probably would have been some good shit, but even then may if you double up on it or get a chorus harmonizing effect on it to soften it up ya voice would be good there, this was a track out of ya ordinary and you pulled it off quite well imo i know you gone hate cus i already jacked it haha but tough, i jack the shit i like haha dope track Kurse keep that shit comin
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
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two thumbs.... and i think wit more practice dude u can rock that hook... i actually dug what u werre sayin in it.

keep on it


P.S. maybe u could bring back diverse for it???
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delivery on the first verse is a bit too deadpan if you know what i'm saying hook/singing needs work almost sounds to me like its autotuned to the wrong key the delivery could be alot better even if its autotuned to the right key you sorta delivered every bar of the hook the same way which doesn't sound very good imo i think it'd come across better with a vocoder & the writing switched a bit to make the hook flow better

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also it'd sound alot better with a female singing backup vocals on the hook
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When you all get a chance...give this song a second listen. The original version that was up here before was a rough draft...
...but also along with this newer version of the song, I got Diverse (b.k.a. OneDiverseKid) to help me polish up the song by doing the hook in his vintage Rock/Rap style and sound. I hope you all enjoy the new release. Updated feed would be greatly appreciated.
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mayne that hook is dope as hell much props to ODK dude has some talent, shit i'm happy i listened to this shit now, much props to you Kurse bringin this shit all together dope song

-- Sat Jul 17, 2010 7:24 pm --

man can i get a download link for this?
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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I love this song...I think you both did a great job....
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Really good song. I think to perfect it, you should turn the vocals down slightly but barely at all. Just on your verses though, the hook is fine. Maybe turn the music up a little. Maybe a little more emotion in your voice? You sound like B.o.B in this drop, I mean it's good don't get me wrong, it's just this song could be classic and amazing rather than just "really good."
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this is MUCH MUCH better than the other one honestly... didn't like the original at all... flow is good... i think u coulda thrown some more emotion in it BUT the beat kinda limits how much emotion you show... that bridge is good... now that there was a bridge added... but ODK is a creative dude... but i give u a lot of credit for this song because its real and you showed the other side of you that nobody really sees... this is a good track man...
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Hey everyone,

I just wanted to give a quick shout out to all the folks who left their feedback on this track. It means a lot that you all took the time to listen to it.

Keep doing what you do.
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Post by FlipSide »

Every mc has to have diversity and this def shows yet another dimention to ya skillz.. tho i agree with law on the emotion... i like the hook tho. Mixed to perfection and flow was on point as usual. I feel this would attract a wider audience and its a good look to have in ya library... good stuff duke
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