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3:35 AM

I'm awoken, the grasp of a bad dream contains me
is it a spirit of hate that tries to replace me
symbolizing speech all this darkness invades me
I start striding down the hall, then I 180....
I can feel something eating me inside, waist deep
I feel kidnap'd I'm older then life itself proclaims
see, I envisioned a world with happiness and so on
as the swirls continue to prolong in my own thoughts
I feel manipulated by life in which I found no loss
life is troubling, but I'm standing for hope y'all
feathers fly through the air as my stroke captivates
a laundry list of problems, I can't plead Santa's case
can't judge a gift, even gifts have they're vast mistakes
see I was burnin' on the weak end, always had sadder days
as the answer awaits, I scribble out another miscue
see my issue is the tendency to fuck up everything, it's due
it's finished but I gotta right everything I already been through
some days life's farfetched a far stretch from within you
so after all the strength is work'd out I might send you
training is a involvement, somedays I'm lost, I'ma loser
beaten to the punch, the licks is dealt by a common suitor
I always knew you wouldn't see it, well thats all on you
sure, you got a thing for me but we dwell with thoughts of futures
they said they placed you into a bed, white sheets, kama sutra
I can't help but feel like I didn't have it all in me to battle
but love is a battlefield, and I know people would need to draft you
correct the wrongs while I lay here, dying for a face lift
rewrite everything one more time, my footsteps could retrace then
I swallow the hardest drink, fell to the ground hearts will sink
I'm shaking from overexposure, tryna find myself a part to fling
I crawl to my washroom, grab the ledge, dip my head into the darkest sink
dealing with the darkness...........drowning

klean shit

kewl

You man I really like this! Alotta quotables in this dude. I would like to see some straight badass story raps from you. I like the emotion and vision in this one. It was worth the read and a bit more 4/5 son

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ThaOneYouHate wrote:The imagery and emotion in this piece is insane homie. If I had to pick one drop out of any of yours as your best drop this would definitely be it. Didn't have the back and forth and random changes in the topical as ya normally do. You definitely executed this drop precisely. Also kept the flow and multies on point. Brought some dope transitions in bars too. Props homie keep on droppin.

word^ he said basically what i was gonna say really. ive read some of ur other pieces just never commented cuz all i do is log on check around an leave lately but thatll change. one thing i might add tho is make it longer! i love readin some krazy deep shit haha,and since i liked this i kno id like more that u drop,stay at it!

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thanx for noticing