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franticly my organic chemistry trys to fight stimulation
pupils dialiating brain isn't comprehendin the simulation
a thin invasion enters the blood stream through oxidation
into the brain steam waiting for the cerebral's enoculation
i stop debating and take another inhale of Damiana herb
makes a slick brainiac turn darker than a castlevania world
the thoughts blurr into simular simoltanious occurances
thinkin of bourban drips and these vertical verbal rifts
wondering if this all is real or just an internal split
of a rap journal-ist urban kid a drifter in this society
never knowin sobriety so quietly he drains himself silently
once a violent breed but that smoke calmed the malice
found a balance toatal elation but maintaining prowlice
the foulness exhaled with ever hit i rip through the bowl
soothes the soul with out the high i'd lose control
and bruise patrolls so, i keep elated and basically wasted

It started out good, in the second line I would have used the word "situation" instead of "simulation" but it still works regardless for the imagery you're trying to convey.

wondering if this all is real or just an internal split
of a rap journal-ist urban kid a drifter in this society


This line threw me off the flow of the piece and the rest after that wasn't as good as how you started it out. I always think the closer could have been stronger cuz I've seen your stuff before so I know you could make that last punch more effective.

yeah i was and am high as fuck at that moment in time

Man looks like u ran out of time with the basically wasted ending.... or i missed it? ehh im tired...

franticly my organic chemistry trys to fight stimulation
pupils dialiating brain isn't comprehendin the simulation
a thin invasion enters the blood stream through oxidation
into the brain steam waiting for the cerebral's enoculation

i stop debating and take another inhale of Damiana herb
makes a slick brainiac turn darker than a castlevania world

like the explanation of how it gets u high in the beggining and how u used that ta show the effects on u or ur character in the middle in end... good transition of storyline... nice lil drop dude

This was purdy different from what I usually see
but at the same time it's purdy dope, nice flow
nice vibe, very smoothly done, keep droppin' my dude