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I made a lil audio of it to see if it gets more peeps


For the lust of a buck i show religion love
In God We Trust My Peers Printed Above
A one Offering a Pun Cuz Its Never Enough

serve Seguls that took reserch ta commit to its cause
Its face of control with no flaws boxed by them ones
The eyes progress but in higher knowledge involved
Hypocritic its vision ta circulate, but say its reserved
Ta conserve the worth of an earned minute ta burn
For the poisoned fruit of the labor u Gave in its turn
Negate ya.. never, in its favor, sins get done...
Wars get fought and with cover the world moves on
While countries starve in need of what makes us strong
when the problems come ..the wise survive with ones
Held with content, and comptent is felt when gone
People done hanged,Then felt repent for they god
Initial plans scrapped Greed reached the man above
Its battle record on its back and its list is of One....

I like this man, not too many touch on this one

lulz....either way I like the imagery and metaphorical presence
very sick flow, smooth flow, good job my dude!
I think it should be extended tho'. it does seem to be written like a song tho'
which prolly explains it, keep writing...to this

actually i will keep writing to it...cuz i spit it on the mic just playing to the renegade beat..and its fire....so i think ill drop a hook and another set to it....thanks for the peep.... Uppppp^^^^^

Yeah i Like The Way This is Presented. When i 1st Looked i Was Like Oh... That's a Bit Short, But Cool u Said What u Said in Those Lines And Didn't Drag it On. Flow Was Good, imagery And Presentation Are What Made This Drop Though, Keep it Up.

Uppin!!!! wit a snippet of what will be my first full feature track

This was pretty good. Had good flow and like stated above, the imagery is what makes this piece stand up. Personally, I feel some nice multies could improve it, but its still a good piece as is. Def add to it.

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Tight shit.
It was a good idea turning it into an audio.
Had some solid lyrics and a good choice for the beat.
You rode that beat too.
Yea, you should definitely finish it and at the end you started flowing what you should keep as the hook.
I liked it.
You ever wanna collab holla.
I'd be privaledged.
Be Eazy

thanks my dude.... for the peep.... if u do audios u should drop so we can see what u workin with