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I Aint Dropped In A While So I Thought I'd Put Sum Shit Up I Have Been Writing

These Haters Aint Shit Better Start Dressin Ya Scars I'll Throw Depression In Shards
A Selection Of Bars That Says Losin For You Is Easy It's The Acceptance Thats Hard
So Pick A Side And Beware My Hand I Unleash Wraths' That Tears Down Stands
Glare Down Fans And This Idiot Has To Sit Down To Work Out Where I Stand!
So Much Evil Deceitfully Tracking Down Light And Seeps Through So Easily
No Sequel Defeating Me,Free From All Prejudice I Hate All People This Equally
Much like Rivers Flow So Natural Much Like The Reverb On An Acapella
Know What They Say, People In Glass Houses, Should Masturbate In The Cellar

Sit Down You Fuckers Are Disgraceful
Time To Get'em

All Of You Minions Shit, Not Even Collared To Chase'em
I'm Top Level Residance You All Bother The Basement
My Smell Of Victorys Near You Tryna Abolish The Fragrance
You Hate On Me But Stay Tryna Astonish Amazement
To Ebonics With Patience Relax And I'm Still Burning You Maggots
Haters Always On The Menu, Thats Why I Keep Servin'em Faggots
I Step To Crackers Laughin Hard Bout How They Wreck A Flacker
Fetch My Dagger, These People Worth Zero, Like That Texas Rapper
That Was Lunch You Fakers Like Camels Stacked With Humps
Put An Extra Boxing Glove In My Suitcase To Really Pack A Punch
Relax You Punks Aint Gettin It I've Entered In To This Game
With New Steps Of Success Nothin Ventured Nothin Gained
You Can Lead A Horse To Water But You Cant Make Him Drink
But I Can Roast The Mafucka On Fire Until The Meat Aint Pink
Turn The Sheet and Just Think You Cant Even Stand In The Street
And Mis Piggy Is The Closest You'll Get To Goin Ham On A Beat
I'm Crammed To My Feet And You Seem Concerned To Feel
With My Lyrics On Cardboard So My Words Are Real
Burnt With Shields No Time To Wonder Frankly
I'm Poised Stood On Ya Back So You Can Under-Stand Me

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"To Ebonics With Patience Relax And I'm Still Burning You Maggots
Haters Always On The Menu, Thats Why I Keep Servin'em Faggots"
This is NASTY

"You Can Lead A Horse To Water But You Cant Make Him Drink
But I Can Roast The Mafucka On Fire Until The Meat Aint Pink"

NIce

Overall i like the flow on the first verse better but u deffo came hardewr with the second verse...well written with multies metaphor and over all vocabulary.... tight drop ...worth peepin people

This was purdy nice, the beginnin' made me think oh this is cool
then the build up commenced it was dope my dude very sick ish
nicely done, got some nice multi's in the beginnin' there wasn't much that stuck out tho'

the following piece really picked up the pace tho'
I'm diggin' it....I do stuff like this but mine is actually random

nicely done! can't wait to see you drop some more

The ending definitely killed it but you went off from the beginning of the second part :

All Of You Minions Shit, Not Even Collared To Chase'em
I'm Top Level Residance You All Bother The Basement
My Smell Of Victorys Near You Tryna Abolish The Fragrance
You Hate On Me But Stay Tryna Astonish Amazement

i'll definitely read more of your stuff

thanks for the feed people will return ASAP

2nd Part Was Better, ive Seen Most Of This On Msn Lol.

ur Getting Better at Punchlines, The Menu Line Was Slick. Flow And Rhymes Were Nice But i Still Think u Try To Cram Too Many Un Needed Rhymes And Multis in, No Biggie Though Everyone Does That And This is One Of ur Best imo. Keep Droppin.

Yeah You Did See A lot Of It haha Well Thanks For The Feed Dom