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still remember the snow

Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 5:40 pm
by Borat
Still remember the snow, still remember the cold.
I was 5 years old, woke snortin my nose.

Pop's said he had to go, for reasons unknown.
Wouldn't speak, tightened his cheeks.

Streached his lips, gave me a hug, touched my head wit a kiss.
His kid shrugged, and he left it at that, took a left at the door... never came back.

You taught me a lot when you left those steps.
Live my life the the fullest never show regret.

Because of you dad, imma never look back.
Broken home had to stay just to keep it in tact.

...crack, zig zag's and cigarette's. Mom's drug of choice never left the bed.
Landlord needs rent, I need a check, had to work a 9 ta 5 to keep the house from a mess.

And you bet, my chedder's never flowin right.
Always in debt, checks never show in time.

An oooooooooolllllllllldddddd rap I wrote. Just heard it on my voice recorder. Thought I would share

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Re: still remember the snow

Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 5:57 pm
by NoVeL
Streached his lips, gave me a hug, touched my head wit a kiss.
His kid shrugged, and he left it at that, took a left at the door... never came back.

You taught me a lot when you left those steps.
Live my life the the fullest never show regret.
Deep.. Doesn't Need Fixing At All

Re: still remember the snow

Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 2:08 am
by QwarterZ
This was very introspective I'm feelin' it
very smooth piece, poetic yet written like a rhyme
well maybe it's a poetic rhyme....whatever good job!!!

lulz!

Re: still remember the snow

Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 10:50 am
by FlipSide
Shit pisses me off!!!!!!!!!!!

Nothing personal...but it stirs something in me thats no good....

Re: still remember the snow

Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 11:16 am
by Borat
^ that's how I felt when I wrote it man

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Re: still remember the snow

Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2010 12:46 am
by FlipSide
no need for them.... its poetry

Re: still remember the snow

Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2010 3:26 am
by Borat
word

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Re: still remember the snow

Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2010 9:40 am
by (Trubblecleff)
with it bein such an emotional retrospective piece i think we would just need to know the rest its unfinished see if u cant tap that part of u and put ur stamp on it.obviously its gonna effect people. generally fans of raps like this went through this or similar circumstances ur gonna have to dig deep to set it apart. if u dont wanna finish it i understand im just tryin to give feed on how to make it " better" dont change it just elaborate