Hip Hop Forum

i wrote in like half hour// feed will be appericate!

gonna take my last breath its gonna be a fast death
bullet blast in my chest i struggle to breath
its trouble n not easy the air around me is hot and breezy
my body starts to rot im sleezy n tired
close my eyes and embrace death in both arms
i go weak and numb i cant speak or hum
my ears are ringing my physic has become a slump
my fears are angels singing coming to collect me
i drift out without a care the angels lift me into the air
i wonder if people down there are aware or stare
at whats going on they're unaware im just a soul
dont exist anymore no voice no control im not whole
im nothing just a fragment of a memory no1 will remember me

I take my last breath i take it deep
savour the moment as i take my last sleep
eyes closed crys and woes shout a loud
of the life i made my dad was proud
mum loved me sister will miss me
as im about to go i feel some1 kiss me
not sure who but i can guess why
im sure they draw tears and will cry
thousands of people do this a day its ballistic
a single death is a tragedy but a million is statistic

if there was a god he did a could job on ur ear sockets

































bizznitch

youve improved a lot with the type errors makes thing easier to follow but i dont feel the vibe or beat rhymes punches multis if u wanna show what u can do think about what ur putting down most of the last drops have been sub par for u. ur topics are deep and and the visuals are nice but as for hip hop, i dont feel it. take ur time u r a good lyricist with potential, show it .i feel like ur lil messages before ur drops are excuses before ive even read the piece. solid poem

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he called me yesterday n told me to DESTROY YOU!














biter!!!

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