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high horse
Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 2:32 am
by eMCee Havic
of course i'ma smack you off your high horse wit force
wit no remorse im gettin right at the source i reinforce
my armor and weapons attackin a session to teach lessons
to prepubescent adolescents packin weapons at seven
and older young men stuck in this gun trend headin 4 one end
so i plunge pens sharply till their done in wit their spun friends
you aint high an mighty cuz your clothes are pricey you might be
a snob thinkin highly getting hyphie being denied rhymes thats spicey
fuck a man who plans to throw no hands to others while he stands
you bland you ran to long on broken feet with high demands
so i knock your block and rock your thoughts wit real hip hop
your not a notch higher than any one spot and you ought not
be here when i get back get your wrist snapped i'm tired of this rift raft
gettin in this rap thinkin they better kid you'll get bitch slapped
Re: high horse
Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 9:15 am
by FlipSide
sounds like u were comin at sum 1...tho nice drop... too many nice lines to quote one...over all close to flawless in my eyes... good multies nice seamless flow for the most part as well
Re: high horse
Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 12:12 pm
by QwarterZ
This was purdy sick, your flow is always on point Modern
got that nasty flow and them sick ass multi's everytime
my armor and weapons attackin a session to teach lessons
to prepubescent adolescents packin weapons at seven
and older young men stuck in this gun trend headin 4 one end
so i plunge pens sharply till their done in wit their spun friends
^^^^^^^^^^^^sometimes I wonder why I didn't think of that
then again when you pull it off it's just siiiick
keep writing my dude!
Re: high horse
Posted: Wed Jun 02, 2010 1:00 am
by Munteskue_lol
Filthy drop, man.
Re: high horse
Posted: Wed Jun 02, 2010 6:23 am
by complexity
Modern Defiance wrote:of course i'ma smack you off your high horse wit force
wit no remorse im gettin right at the source i reinforce
my armor and weapons attackin a session to teach lessons
to prepubescent adolescents packin weapons at seven
and older young men stuck in this gun trend headin 4 one end
so i plunge pens sharply till their done in wit their spun friends
[I like the continuous style, ala Rakim. The wording was very careful that helped the flow too.]
you aint high an mighty cuz your clothes are pricey you might be
a snob thinkin highly getting hyphie being denied rhymes thats spicey
[I don't like this]
fuck a man who plans to throw no hands to others while he stands
you bland you ran to long on broken feet with high demands
so i knock your block and rock your thoughts wit real hip hop
your not a notch higher than any one spot and you ought not
be here when i get back get your wrist snapped i'm tired of this rift raft
gettin in this rap thinkin they better kid you'll get bitch slapped
[Nice ending bar]
The structure was great and all, the wording was alright. All that being said, I found this to be a very bland drop. Maybe it would work as a freestyle in the park type of deal, when you have all the tools of the internet at your disposal though, I want to see something a bit more spectacular.
On that note, the feedback on this site has become systematic. I use to be one of the nicest guys. Now people think that I have an inferior complex attitude because I'm the only one who regularly gets critical. It seems like the only time that anyone leaves any constructive criticism on a piece is when the person did it to them, almost as a frail attempt at revenge. If we don't have the courage or determination to call one another out on our inadequacies then we will never be able to look at ourselves with the least biased mirror possible. That's my rant.