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wrote this when i was feelin a bit down check it out feed it!!!!

depressed chest caved in a dark age
blood tastes great cuz its an escape

from my sparked rage inhale the smoke
from my last puff of jane fly away soul

takes me away for my personal cage purgatory
leave carnage behind rewind time can't find

whats wrong with my mind everything i touch
is vanquished so i guess i'm anxious to leave

my body anguished evaporate in thin air don't
cry when i leave or when i get there where am i

goin i stare into a mirror i shiver i'm cold my
body is floating in the river my liver shuts down

n fails my ghost wails cuz it sees how badly my
body is frail i leave entrails of feces with

everything i touch i'm fucked up don't trust i'm
too hellish u'll get burnt up severely everything

near me dissipates i try n participate but legend
has it i gotta fucked up mental state i reiterate

i live for hate disown my heart cuz whats there to
cause a spark i make my mark i shatter thoughts that

exit dark so i end my target where it starts my head
spins in 360 can't get rid of what i feel cuz i'm

empty a shell of a man u see knee deep as i creep
seap into eternal hell so i peacefully sleep feelings

are deep cuz i can't erase what i am and frankly
who said i ever gave a damn? like sam i am ask

for another round of sorrow don't have that much
time so why would i borrow? just end it forget all

of my sins i've replenished my forgiveness i'm sick
of where i had to begin it so just end it.......

{claps} rough spots but it was nice i stumbled over parts here and there but i like that a lot

thanx man appreciate it... go check my flow in the writtens...

you did a good job portrayin' Darkness bruh bruh

Lmafao! I like qz's feed haha. Naw but lawgix this was pretty tight. I was darkness for sure man. Write more poetry son

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i did have more on here but plex deleted older posts... so yeah i may repost em...

Not A Bad Spit Just A Bit Sketchy.. Maybe You Needed 2 Re-word A Few Pieces In The Drop n It Woulda Been A Solid Read. But I Found The Rhythm n Followed Your Flow Which Made It A Decent Script.

What Stuck Out 2 Me Was

depressed chest caved in a dark age
blood tastes great cuz its an escape

from my sparked rage inhale the smoke
from my last puff of jane fly away soul

Is This A Smoker's Passion..? 1 of Those "Imma Smoke Till Tha Day I DIE" Type Joints Right?
If So.. I'm Feelin It

nah its a not a "smoke weed till i die"... its about being depressed...