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You really lived up to your name on this one, but what I'm going to quote is by far the lines that I liked the most.

"Attack If You Will.. I'M As Agile As A Fencer Only Using The Tip Of A Quill/ I Initial Creativity n Display Vividly, These Niggas Say My Drops Are Played, Great!! Are They Kidding Me?
I Got Tons Of Scripts Some Are Writ Some Are Hid, Some Are Sick & Some Are Eh/ But Most Are Re-Recorded In My Cerebrum Sessions Right Before I Spit/"

I can't wait to read the rest of it.

"At Any Given Time I Can Torch A Skit, The Fire Inside Burns Like STD's Scorched Ya Tip/ No Remorse I'll R.I.P ANY Emcee You Retort Or Lip, Any Mic You Resort Or Spi"

I could have lived without this, if you wouldn't have repeated spit, this might have came off doper to me. I understand it might sound good in idea. Calling back that rhyme, what I would have done, and I'm surely not an expert. Is tried to rhyme "Eh" and "writ" as the final bar. Like "shit to say". That's not ideal, just giving an example.

Good job though. Enjoyable.

The Fact Of The Matter Is I Hate It, Fabrications Relayed & Recreated.
A Site Installed 2 Concur Some Lies n Defer Ya Mind, Thinking It Would Help Betta Ya Skills If You Urged Some People 2 Just Observe Ya Rhymes. But Nobody Feeds Back Or Even Blurts A Line..

Ewwwww kid thats nasty

This was purdy cool, needs to be finished for a full detailed compliment tho'
smooth flow
better then when you first started droppin' here
keep writing!

finish it

The Fact Of The Matter Is I Hate It, Fabrications Relayed & Recreated.
A Site Installed 2 Concur Some Lies n Defer Ya Mind, Thinking It Would Help Betta Ya Skills If You Urged Some People 2 Just Observe Ya Rhymes. But Nobody Feeds Back Or Even Blurts A Line.. FUCK Being Heard Its Fine I'd Rather Swallow, Chug Or Deep-throat A Bottle Of Turpentine.

Good Build Up,Could of even Reached for a Stronger beggining but at the Same time Emotions Built up To a Snap.


I Birthed My Art & Crafted My Skill/ Cultivated, Despite The Lack Of Motivation I've Briefly Mastered Elevation By Will/ Bypassing Haters With Stamping Feet n Gnashing Of Grills, Attack If You Will.. I'M As Agile As A Fencer Only Using The Tip Of A Quill/

Lol Alright.

I Initial Creativity n Display Vividly, These Niggas Say My Drops Are Played, Great!! Are They Kidding Me?
I Got Tons Of Scripts Some Are Writ Some Are Hid, Some Are Sick & Some Are Eh/

This is a bar u should Redo if anything

But Most Are Re-Recorded In My Cerebrum Sessions Right Before I Spit/ At Any Given Time I Can Torch A Skit, The Fire Inside Burns Like STD's Scorched Ya Tip/ No Remorse I'll R.I.P ANY Emcee You Retort Or Lip, Any Mic You Resort Or Spit, Too Bad & While Your Doing That Why Don't You Forefeit It/

Resort Or Grip.

always Read ya Multis over out loud to Make sure Everything Makes sense.

Niggas Is Anti- Climatic, Flippin Predicatable Bars Like Aero Gymnastics Doing Aerocrobatics, I'll Spare Few Addicts.. By Servin em Crack. These Cursive Raps Are Lethal Metronome Shots That'll Leave Ya Spirit Detached. No Other Emcee Can Mirror Me Back, I'm A Vampire The Way I Lyrically Vamp


Vamp... > Scrape?

Anyways This was Good, your Def Showing Elevation
All i Could Say is Sharpen The Hay's & Keep Up The Weaving Words.


Good shit

Stay Up N Keep Dropping

I Appreciate The Feed My Peeps Trust n Believe It Will Be Returned!

Got Tons Of Scripts Some Are Writ Some Are Hid, Some Are Sick & Some Are Eh/ But Most Are Re-Recorded In My Cerebrum Sessions Right Before I Spit/

Filthyy!!!!