Hip Hop Forum

I be that young shorty, fly, smooth, glorious kid
A Bad Boy just like Notorious B.I.G
A Rockafella like Sean Carter
With more game than Vince Carter
The bomb sparker
rapper slash armed robber
While yall be on the corner bummin' and gettin' high
I be out buyin' the finest shit money can buy
You wish you was in the position that I'm in
Hot rhymin'
Diamonds shinin'
Autograph signin'
My lifestyle is far out
Every week bring a different car out
I go to night clubs and buy the bar out
... uhh... 'Cause I keep clean
I'm large on the street scene
Every time I touch mics you hear all the freaks scream

Yeah!...Yeah!... Deafshady
Orlando's Finest
The nigga who hold it down from uptown

[2PAC]
Hahaha...
This' how we do it out here on this underground real shit nigga
It's the heat nigga
Now rewind this mothafucka you know you can't help it!

this read was about as gay as your name... just sayin...

eeeeesh. i dunno what this was sposed to be. was i supposed to really think 2pac typed the ending? cus if he DID, then you my friend, are a man among boys.
im EXTREMELY jealous. but seriously, i think if he WAS alive, he'd shoot himself dead after readin this. although, on a lighter note, you did have a few ku lines. even though i find the lines hard to believe. ive read ur other shit dawg, and u should prolly stick to that. wasnt really a good idea throwin pac under the bus like that, imo. just a lil constructive critisism

It didn't flow in my head at all. You have potential though. Your metaphors are average, but it's good that you recognize the importance of metaphors in rhymes. You also show an aptitude for developing multis, but they are very forced. The lyrical content was unimpressive and sounds a lot like what I don't want hip-hop to become (what it's already pretty much become). You're not horrible, though.

thanks guys, i just look thur pac lyrics n see pac verse so i decide to put it under my lyrics cos it does sound so good to my flow tho...

riiiiiiight......I see some played lines
I think when I said bringing back that good ol hip hop vibe.....
well...........I don't think you should go ALL OUT tryna bring it back like that....you sir
need some originality now....keep writing



























BUT don't let this happen again

pretty cocky to put pac out there like that even if u were good enough this was weaker than most everything else youve done and u chose to put pac on this u need to think about ur decisions a lil more in depth cuz when u dont stupid shit seems to happen to put it in a positive way