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Random Flow
Posted: Tue Mar 16, 2010 11:48 am
by Felons Verse
Sick rhymes Im full blooded-with-those..a FIENDIN MENACE//
So Smooth and flooded-with-flows like the STREETS OF VENICE//
MEET YA END ITS, grim-n-violent in-the-silence of NIGHT OR DAY//
I INCITE THE RAGE when I act like dentist equipment n LIGHT YA FACE//
Fel IGNITES THE PAGE, fake emcees, it's a FACT THOSE PLUMMET//
But my pockets stay thick like rolls on FAT JOE'S STOMACH//
Im comin BACK AROUND, stop ACTIN NOW get to BACKIN DOWN//
The legendary? Im IT and you aint bout no ACTION CLOWN//
My FACTION POUNDS anybody in the way, so please STAY CLEAR//
Cuz THEY FEAR nobody..we stay thumpin like a herd of 38 STEER//
You a FLOPPIN LAME so whys ya jaw still POPPIN MAYNE//
We NOT THE SAME put a laser on ya gun..still aint TOPPIN MY GAME//
I GOT THE FLAME like a Bic, yeah its me SAYIN THAT//
Cuz fuck with me n be like a HDTV..always STAYIN FLAT//
You LAYIN BACK while Im like railroad fires..BLAZIN TRACKS//
MAKIN STACKS, the level your at...FE.L. Click go RACIN PAST//
Re: Random Flow
Posted: Tue Mar 16, 2010 11:46 pm
by !ll Ego
kinda like this but you don't have to Cap ur multies.
Fel IGNITES THE PAGE, fake emcees, it's a FACT THOSE PLUMMET//
But my pockets stay thick like rolls on FAT JOE'S STOMACH//
Im comin BACK AROUND, stop ACTIN NOW get to BACKIN DOWN//
The legendary? Im IT and you aint bout no ACTION CLOWN//
pretty decent, flowed ok, vocab was good.
not a bad drop bro.
Re: Random Flow
Posted: Wed Mar 17, 2010 8:22 am
by Felons Verse
Thx bruh, its always been in my nature to CAP multi's, srry if its not allowed lol, but ive always done it.
Re: Random Flow
Posted: Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:13 am
by complexity
Felons Verse wrote:Sick rhymes Im full blooded-with-those..a FIENDIN MENACE//
So Smooth and flooded-with-flows like the STREETS OF VENICE//
[I don't associate floods with Venice, but cool enough]
MEET YA END ITS, grim-n-violent in-the-silence of NIGHT OR DAY//
I INCITE THE RAGE when I act like dentist equipment n LIGHT YA FACE//
[No]
Fel IGNITES THE PAGE, fake emcees, it's a FACT THOSE PLUMMET//
But my pockets stay thick like rolls on FAT JOE'S STOMACH//
[Good]
Im comin BACK AROUND, stop ACTIN NOW get to BACKIN DOWN//
The legendary? Im IT and you aint bout no ACTION CLOWN//
[Useless]
My FACTION POUNDS anybody in the way, so please STAY CLEAR//
Cuz THEY FEAR nobody..we stay thumpin like a herd of 38 STEER//
[Nope]
You a FLOPPIN LAME so whys ya jaw still POPPIN MAYNE//
We NOT THE SAME put a laser on ya gun..still aint TOPPIN MY GAME//
[The Multis were off and that made this bar unreadable]
I GOT THE FLAME like a Bic, yeah its me SAYIN THAT//
Cuz fuck with me n be like a HDTV..always STAYIN FLAT//
[Alright]
You LAYIN BACK while Im like railroad fires..BLAZIN TRACKS//
MAKIN STACKS, the level your at...FE.L. Click go RACIN PAST//
[Decent]
More misses than hits. You'd be swinging at about 200 if you were playing baseball, which isn't good enough for lyrics, put some more effort into the bars, and don't just rhyme something because it rhymes.
Re: Random Flow
Posted: Sat Mar 20, 2010 1:47 pm
by Haz
Sick rhymes Im full blooded-with-those..a FIENDIN MENACE//
So Smooth and flooded-with-flows like the STREETS OF VENICE//
MEET YA END ITS, grim-n-violent in-the-silence of NIGHT OR DAY//
I INCITE THE RAGE when I act like dentist equipment n LIGHT YA FACE//
lol no
Fel IGNITES THE PAGE, fake emcees, it's a FACT THOSE PLUMMET//
But my pockets stay thick like rolls on FAT JOE'S STOMACH//
it's a played concept homie
Im comin BACK AROUND, stop ACTIN NOW get to BACKIN DOWN//
The legendary? Im IT and you aint bout no ACTION CLOWN//
ok
My FACTION POUNDS anybody in the way, so please STAY CLEAR//
Cuz THEY FEAR nobody..we stay thumpin like a herd of 38 STEER//
No
You a FLOPPIN LAME so whys ya jaw still POPPIN MAYNE//
We NOT THE SAME put a laser on ya gun..still aint TOPPIN MY GAME//
No
I GOT THE FLAME like a Bic, yeah its me SAYIN THAT//
Cuz fuck with me n be like a HDTV..always STAYIN FLAT//
Flame Bick, TV staying Flat .... already said a hundred times
You LAYIN BACK while Im like railroad fires..BLAZIN TRACKS//
MAKIN STACKS, the level your at...FE.L. Click go RACIN PAST//
blazing tracks a iight,.
I think you got the multis part n all But the Punches aren't there lol n it seems like what u attempt the Most, so a solution would be try to get deeper with the punches, instead always dropping played ones n just shitting on noone but yourself, multis n flow is there But u could use some improvement, who doesn't need to improve Though.
stay Up n keep Dropping