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An artistic word scientist, I've painted a noun concoction
Crowned for the sounds I've been Crossin', being this profound is exhausting.
Surrounded by options, I chose to astound crowds with my toxins.
Endowed with a prowess for prose, I plowed through the average and common.
My mission's statement's evident, a penchant for settin' precedents,
glitchin' aint my residence so my wisdom's the best in print.
My sentences intense (in-tents) and I never write while camping,
I inject intelligence into my style of ranting,
to convince unerringly that your equivalence to me
is false imagery, an inplausible assertion based on a dream.
Never hestitating, confidence always on hand
cuz excellence is a habit not just a one night stand.
When questioned in life, I answered on the page,
I been tested and tried but I emerged unscathed.

I'm diggin' how your uppin' your vocab
makes it very dope for the reader


until you start dumbing it down that makes me


but you doin' your thing I'm diggin' it!

to convince unerringly that your equivalence to me
is false imagery, an inplausible assertion based on a dream

keep writing, you are improving nicely, and I would like to read more
keep doin' you dawg

Thanks for the feedback bro. Anyone else?

Hey man,
I would leave feedback on all of your drops but im not very good at giving it, Since i dont know too much about lyricism and all of its components.

But from my point of view (a guy that likes reading all these diffrent styles of rapping )

Id say this was good,
Your vocab was impressive
But sometimes i felt like your flow was kinda choppy,
Maybe im not reading it how its meant to be read.

i give it a 7/10

Flows the only thing that lowered the score for me.
The i loved the metaphores
my fave :

"Never hestitating, confidence always on hand
cuz excellence is a habit not just a one night stand."

JJ, I see where you're going man.. good job on the vocab and trying to incorporate word play within it. Often times we jeopordize flow for intellect. The key is to get them both in. Watch your syllables and adjust your flow.

Nice job man.

was feeling this for the most part, some areas need work, I mean, I'm not gonna say this was amazing or mind boggling, it was pretty solid though...

"My mission's statement's evident, a penchant for settin' precedents,
glitchin' aint my residence so my wisdom's the best in print.
My sentences intense (in-tents) and I never write while camping,
I inject intelligence into my style of ranting,"
^that part right there I was def feeling heat, no doubt...

overall pretty nice drop, stay up, do you, and please return feed on my latest drop. 1