Hip Hop Forum

I hopscotch back and forth between childhood memories-remembering-enemies thoughts were soon to dismiss- i missed-my first kiss-these kids would assist-in the wish of a-slit-wrist-pissed, cause i was always picked on, cry from night to dawn, till it dawned on me, to take a knife to school and see-em-spree, see it would be-my-dream, to watch-em run and-screem, Then i woke up, pissed and fucked up, i got jumped, just for bieng a nerd, and wantin to learn, father was stern, had to stand and earn, my respect, it's the only way to survive...

spree's a noun not a verb

it's wrote pretty well i like the unpredictable rhyme scheme you used but most of the dashes were unneccessary when you see people using dashes they do it to show the multis

like "i've thumb-wrestled-the-hands-of-time till every sun-set'll-just-damn-the-life of a thug-nestled-with-grams-and-pipes"

I liked it man. Mad potential shown.

Thank You

IiGhT tHiS iS tIghT

You wrote a verse about getting picked on? haha

I was the nigga during recess beating little pussies like you down, grow a dick nigga

HaHa. Me ToO.

its clear you don't get it...sooo keep it to yaself...i actually never got bullied....just thought i would write on it