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a witness of sickness

Posted: Wed Feb 03, 2010 6:38 am
by eMCee Havic
A carnivore eating up the beef like a tyrannosaur
addin more skill to music than it has had before
as i stand before crowds a pro to all you Amateurs
slamin doors in the faces of all who came before
the same ignore, me cause i'm like a dirty senator
a matador chasing bulls with blankets an raw energy
sending me on more goose chases than all my enemies
i render these half skilld rabbits wit mass epiphanies
by ripping beats limb from limb like broken symphonies
instantly defeatin fiends a battalion to your infantry
this is me not some other writer who has bitten me
wit rhythm frees i bust your teeth wit out parentheses
in prison free cause they'll never be defeatin me
i beat emcees physically mentally causin felonies
telling me i'm not greatest is like rap witout melody
i seldom be upfront but my ship is in a sailin breeze
so i'm mailin these words to a world that is failin me
my fantasy is graphically trappin me in a nasty scene
this rapper be going insane but yet has mastered speech
my destiny is clouded like pollution has clouded vanity
my sanity is no longer existent thanks to you humanity
this man can breathe when the world is dead of Christianity
if you ask of me to help it. i cant cause pain has trampled me


feed it please

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Wed Feb 03, 2010 7:39 am
by QwarterZ
I'm diggin' it man the multi's were on point
the style is dope as always, I'm diggin' how you linkin' different words together

the whole Tyranasaur amatuer ish....DOPE
and you bout to get jacked LoL! just playin'
either way this was on point! keep writing!

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Thu Feb 04, 2010 10:13 am
by eMCee Havic
thanks qz still uppin this piece
(feed will be returned)

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Thu Feb 04, 2010 10:33 am
by Loon E Lou
damn. where to begin.....um. the shit flowed perfect imo. i flowed it out loud an errything. shit was on point. lotta multies. all em fit together clean. good opener, good closer. you didnt really force shit from what i read. i beat emcees physically mentally causin felonies<----i dunno why, but my fav line. if u got audio, id like to hear it. otherwise, keep droppin dawg. i like what i read

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Thu Feb 04, 2010 2:06 pm
by Absolute
Yeah no lie...that was nice. Props. I have no complaints in any category for this piece. I look forward to the next read from you. I challenge you to impress me next time.

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Thu Feb 04, 2010 4:52 pm
by eMCee Havic
good lookin, still uppin

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Thu Feb 04, 2010 7:17 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
you have mos def elevated since ive been gone man... props on that! thought it jus got raw halfway thru all the way to the end. that whole part was my favorite ... keep droppin em homie!!!

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Fri Feb 05, 2010 6:59 am
by eMCee Havic
thanks sym still uppin this beast

Re: a witness of sickness

Posted: Fri Feb 05, 2010 6:13 pm
by Vaughn
Fyah!!! I felt that... from one real emcee to another, you got skills dawg... keep beastin... I wrote a rhyme about 7 years ago wit a similar N and E pattern at the end and your verse may have surpassed mine.. if I find it I'll up it... but still very good shit.

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