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5 bars, due in 24 hours.

-- Wed Jan 27, 2010 2:10 pm --

Check.

u fuckin with the nemesis, the reaper, devil affiliated a true demon//
murkin season, please believe once u enter my gates u aint leavin//


im breathin fire havin u feelin like u walkin in brimstone and flames//
how u down in my domain but when embraced in flames u screamin Jesus name?//

its a damn shame how fast i can murk this bitch//
when im lurkin its murda havin this demon grippin his crucifix//

see hell in my mind puts fire in my eyes//
while u thinkin of tryin ask urself is ur wish 2 find urself dyin//

look at him cryin...ive took his spirit and watched his soul burn//
i spit napalm and ether, so demon be cautious of how u chose ur words//

Ok...

first..
Nemesis be in attack mode and stop talking about yourself.
Demon, from the look of your verse, it appears recycled because not once did you mention the fact that you were actually battling a guy named Nemesis. Just used generic attacks like "This guy, and this child" which could've been used in past battles or just some generic shit you wrote down for quick battles.
Additionally the "8 lines" you dropped were basically 3 bars, because I highly doubt you can say "If you say Nigger" or "Yea I hate your music" is considered a line in any sense of the word.

I'm not going to break this down, because you both need to work on attacking your opp.. but since Nemesis seemed to at least be battling Demon I'm going with Nemesis.

Demon, you have punchlines, that's obvious, but aim them at your opp rather than just spitting them randomly. You could've taken this battle (and may still), rather than have one vote against you starting off.

vote = Nemesis

Can we keep the votes coming..

I personally preferred da nemesis because although I didn't particularly like it, it was original. Every line in Demon's verse is a line I've heard or read before.

Vote Nemesis

ok i agree both of these verses are weak as shit demon's things i dont think are recycled but are very common such as the zoo keeper lion i think joel made a zoo keeper ceeotar cuz he used it on cee 4 and alphabet soup alot of main stream rappers from wayne and underground like 40 cal have used that so

vote-nemesis

idk but i guess 3-0=ko but idk if vaughn vote will count anyway