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My Scriptures are Pictures of Corridors Filled with Slaughter/
My Descriptions are Burning Depictions of Horror/
Sick Visions of Killings Cause Lyrical Technicians to Shiver and Cower/
My Wisdom and Power Have Entwined in Fusion/
Contusions and Bruises For any Intrusion/
Dreams and Illusions get Invaded by Raiders/
your Hits are Evaded by a Force Stronger than Vaders/
My Verse is Ingraved in your Brain,Your Thoughts Get Inslaved/
You Cry out in Pain,your Whole Frame is Melted in a River of Flames/
Your Skull gets Incased on a Shelf near my Drapes/

-- Fri Jan 15, 2010 12:48 am --

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ILL vocab Duck.. as always.. I'd like to see a 10-12 bar post from you. Topical, like "The World Sucks" or something. I think you could pull the word play and vocab off real good and make it interesting.

thx for the feed man, i'll prob do that tomorrow.

The ending kinda made me want more, but it was good. This verse had an awesome structure to it cause it was different, and all the inners thrown in made it real slick. Good vocab and imagination too, I liked it.

thx for the feed