Consider

[PhD]

dawn of a renaissance, I have a dream
awakened by the phenomenon of the red, black and green
Garvey, Carmichael, X and King
our advocates esteemed utter Blackness as a beautiful thing
our champions screamed WE are worthy to be redeemed
witness the tapestry of our ancestry a pageantry of Kings and Queens
who reigned supreme
but there’s a dichotomy a shift from these things
committed by ignorant fools who find it necessary to blaspheme
shredding the very fibers of fabric, tragic the flags ripped at the seams
I anguish, cringe at the present scene,
consider,
Black Power unity was an imposing figure,
When the movement exploded hope couldn’t be any bigger
Bustling with resolve, gusto, and vigor
So we must know, its whack to call each other bitches and niggas,
but here’s the kicker,
our heroes fought those in robes who called us coons and critters,
Damn straight I’m bitter, cuz I see us as victors and winners,
but the use of the “N” word, in this we need to be quitters,
cuz hell nah, fo damn sho I ain’t nobody’s nigga!


help a brotha perfect it!

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[eMCee Havic]

committed by ignorant fools who find it necessary to blaspheme
shredding the very fibers of fabric, tragic the flags ripped at the seams

^ i liked that shit right there

this whole flow was dope, good concept stayed on topic. kept the flow in motion ever tho the structure was all over the place. it was hella good piece. nice drop man

[PhD]

Thanks for the feedback. Explain structure and flow. I'm a rookie at this.