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I'm stuck in my ways, watchin the dust and the rain mix/
Discussin the day my plane touches the pavement/
So much for my patience, I see the buses just waitin/
But in my gut, I wonder how we'll adjust to the changes/
Nothing's the same, I feel like I'm caught in a rut/
Life is hard, I'm just trying to soften it up/
Thought I was tough, but you saw the flaws in my bluff/
So now I'm lost, my faults were the cause of the lust/
Its cost us so much, barely survived a year away/
And now I'm coming home knowing that same fear is here to stay/
We can't stop it, we both admit we've got problems/
But the only way is up once you've reached rock bottom/
We have our doubts, I can see your mind's clouded/
Wondering if this hole is too deep to climb out of/
The time's now but one thing is still scarin me/
If I lift you out, will you help me or just bury me/
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Post by Riggz »

What, you wrote this on the C140 touching down? :lol:

"Nothing's the same, I feel like I'm caught in a rut/
Life is hard, I'm just trying to soften it up/"

Still got the hottest text delivery... set'em up knock'em down.. best in the game!

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Post by Frank Black »

ha this was a nice easy read nothing really crazy creative buh ya delivery made this peice GREAT man

like ya setups are beatiful! nice job ma nicca!
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Post by RainMan »

FINALLY MAN I BEEN WAITING FOR SOME RUCKUS SHIT.

And the piece seems pretty ill like usual.
A few bars are a bit streched but its well done,
Like Joey said, Nothing really crazy or stands out
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this ill my dude, like a lot of people can rhyme words fluently but you still always use great imagery metaphors and such i think thats what really sets your stuff apart for me, closer was perfect, good stuff always nice to read your work
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preciate the feed yall.
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Post by Dana Riot »

I agree with Haze, you have a talent for making an intricate and thought out verse somewhat simple and easy to read, and that's hard to do when presenting imagery at that level and and fitting what you have to say in without force.
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co-sign ^^


this was a hot read famo!!! looking forward to more dorps from you!
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Post by Toxidious »

Kids a sly writer, I'll give him that.

He has that intricate lyrical madness like Madame Riot pointed out. Just the middle dude, feels like you didn't put enough effort into it.

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Post by eMCee Havic »

yeah i agree, sup ruckus.. havent seen ya in a while dope drop homie.. i like d the whole piece sick shit man like damn

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Post by QwarterZ »

I was diggin' this, suprised I missed it other then that
the flow was nice, added to the delivery
had a bunch of nice lines in this which I like reading

Life is hard, I'm just trying to soften it up/
Thought I was tough, but you saw the flaws in my bluff/
So now I'm lost, my faults were the cause of the lust/
Its cost us so much, barely survived a year away/
And now I'm coming home knowing that same fear is here to stay/
^^^^^^I really liked that part...keep writing
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