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Due Sunday Noon or face DQ.
8 bars
No feeding
No check in's needed just drop your verse.
G-luck my man.

-- Fri Jan 01, 2010 9:54 pm --

Riggz wrote:Due Sunday Noon or face DQ.
8 bars
No feeding
No check in's needed just drop your verse.
G-luck my man.

I’m… Smokin’ Ambition to a mineral remain, achieving cynical acclaim
Climbing the pinnacle just to maim… ridicule and stain

The mere mention of Ambitions only applies to those striving
Not to those arriving, Dude, there’s no restrictions to my rhyming

As for you, you such a hopeless shit, betta sober quick or surrender this
I’m elevating, desperation got you movin side to side like some tennis kicks

Eat your spinach quick if your “ambition” is to finish Riggz with ruinous
Illusive clips of written scripts leaves elixir sewage drips

Your blows are thrown panicky, while I’m romantically manic wit fists
I swear to god I’m crack his skull and shred his cabbage ta bits

I hit “ambitious” strays with a type of youngster’s haste,
For this kid to get with Riggz is quite a conundrum raised

Where’s your Army Amb? My writs advance upon brigades,
Sin-Say, my tongue’s blade will swiftly slice this young nave

Call the coroner, this foreigner is unfamiliar with the foreign theme
Cause with me, identities, tend to be… stripped and quarantined

"I Like this job... I really do" LOL

Vote folks... keep the Grounds movin!

I’m… Smokin’ Ambition to a mineral remain, achieving cynical acclaim
Climbing the pinnacle just to maim… ridicule and stain

ok it makes sense and it has matching multis, but wheres the punch? 2/5

The mere mention of Ambitions only applies to those striving
Not to those arriving, Dude, there’s no restrictions to my rhyming

ok that was pretty good 3/5

As for you, you such a hopeless shit, betta sober quick or surrender this
I’m elevating, desperation got you movin side to side like some tennis kicks

syllables matched but delivery was way off dude, im beginning to catch an up down pattern in this verse.
2/5

Eat your spinach quick if your “ambition” is to finish Riggz with ruinous
Illusive clips of written scripts leaves elixir sewage drips

idk where the diss is here.. but the flow changed in a positive way here. 3/5

Your blows are thrown panicky, while I’m romantically manic wit fists
I swear to god I’m crack his skull and shred his cabbage ta bits

first bar sounds cool, whats his cabbage referring to though? lol
you need to get a little more clever with ur bars 3/5

I hit “ambitious” strays with a type of youngster’s haste,
For this kid to get with Riggz is quite a conundrum raised

ok ok 3/5

Where’s your Army Amb? My writs advance upon brigades,
Sin-Say, my tongue’s blade will swiftly slice this young nave

ok got some creativity in there with "tongue's blade"
3/5

Call the coroner, this foreigner is unfamiliar with the foreign theme
Cause with me, identities, tend to be… stripped and quarantined

4/5
the best bar in ur verse, a little personal in there, butdude u really need to work on punches and creativity, the simplicity is what i know ur striving for but u barely hit ambition in ur verse, u were just sorta playing with multis...

20/40 total



Who Permitted This Kid a Mouth? Hes Trash No Hidden Doubt
i'll Provide um With a Harness To Hang Um Self.. Rigg Ya Out..

Nameplay, flow, punch delivery..check, good opener 4/5

Why Take a Shot when you Wasn't Even Deserving a Jab?
Most Ya Phrases Are Forced Turning Words To The Badge

decent attack 3/5

You a Sorry Ass Nigga So Wheres My Apology At??
He a Wanna Be Star Tryna come Complex With Astrology Facts

Nice wordplay, both lines, first bar's kinda played but good filler anyways
4/5

2012 Hokes stop acting like Your Ending Me Hater
I Went To War With Heads u Got No History Like a Chemistry Major

another clever line 4/5

Your Minds in a Drought ya Egos Tryna Dive ..
Approaching Amb U 'Called Out Fa Death' Suicidal Living a Nine Ta Five

i didnt really feel this one much, second line's flow seemed hella stretched
2/5

a Few Schemes Ain't Nothing To a C.I.A Operative..
Riggz Mimicks Pay It Forward still Lyrically a Bum Thinking He 'Got To Give'

same here, theres a good wordplay in it, but ehh 2/5

You Hold No Status Equipped With a Myspace Mood...
Ur Equavilent To Weed 'Tryna Hit The D Like a Terror Fly case Dude

so so ending, 3/5
i think u stopped trying after bar 4.. u need more consistency and it wouldve been a land slide

21/35 total


All in all Riggz either didnt try, or just came up short in a battle against one of the better battlers of this site. Idk, but his other battles he seemed more affective when he had fresh punches.. its cool to win a couple battles, but the challenge is to continue to win and the only way to do that is come up with hard hitting and new punches. Ambition killed him with a school themed verse.

Ambition gets my vote bar for bar..


1-0 Amb

" butdude u really need to work on punches and creativity, the simplicity is what i know ur striving for but u barely hit ambition in ur verse, u were just sorta playing with multis..." - agreed. Still working out the kinks in "complex multi syllable battle verses".

Thanks for voting Arv

yea riggz this wasnt a complete fail buh there was basically no effectiveness in ya verse lol.

"The mere mention of Ambitions only applies to those striving
Not to those arriving, Dude, there’s no restrictions to my rhyming"

come one dude. MVGT: Ambition!

multies: ehh rigz
Flow: Amb
punches: amb
Wordplay/nameplay: ehh amb
structure: tie
personals: none

good ish tho guys !

Note to self: Complex multi-syllable rhyming with minimal/no punches don't win battles. Got it. Thanks guys. Ambition, nice punches boy. I'll get you next time.

3-0 KO Ambition wins it.

Jeaaah .. K.O. some1 update it ..
And Young Dosia who The Fuck Are You LMAO?
Your Style?? Huh.

You will soon find out who i am...

and Yes My Style..

Good Battle Tho Fellaz

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