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I ain't talking bench press, but I'm raising the bar
I'm commanding metaphors like an army at war
a purple hearted explorer I been wounded and scarred
consumed by remarks meant to leave me fuming and charred
But I'm immune to the shards, cuz like a phoenix I rose
composed a helix of flows with genius weaved into prose
exceeded previous woes with a routine that arose
of sealing feelings in quotes that produced medical notes
...Intellectual strokes that I created and wrote
to engross and bestow an exposition of gold
A new edition I hold so intermission the old
and In addition behold the definition of bold
a blind magician so cold my spells are all i see (icy)
impelled to scrawl nightly til my farewell's frightening
til I'm compared to the kings and declared one with ease
til my feats reach their peak and i accomplish my dreams

I ain't talking bench press, but I'm raising the bar
I'm commanding metaphors like an army at war
a purple hearted explorer I been wounded and scarred
consumed by remarks meant to leave me fuming and charred


Fire yo ..

But I'm immune to the shards, cuz like a phoenix I rose
composed a helix of flows with genius weaved into prose

Feels like a biggie flow ..


exceeded previous woes with a routine that arose
of sealing feelings in quotes that produced medical notes


i Don't Like This .. Feel Like its just worded weird & doesnt fall through right


Intellectual strokes that I created and wrote
to engross and bestow an exposition of gold
A new edition I hold so intermission the old
and In addition behold the definition of bold

Haha i Like This ..


a blind magician so cold my spells are all i see (icy)
impelled to scrawl nightly til my farewell's frightening
til I'm compared to the kings and declared one with ease
til my feats reach their peak and i accomplish my dreams


Could of Came With a Stronger Finisher ..

6.5/10


Decent verse, Keep Dropping

This was kewl....I thought it was goin' to be somethin' nicer
It's still nice but the title is somewhat misleadin' then again I see your vocab buildin' up aswell

which is nice! either way this piece came together nicely
flow was on point for the most part....and well...keep writing! LoL!

of sealing feelings in quotes that produced medical notes
...Intellectual strokes that I created and wrote

pretty sick man

flow was good, complexity was ill. overall good piece man