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My rhymes are like black magic
ancient poems on cracked tablets
or Black Sabbath
trippin' on tabs of acid
My rap is visual
so the paint brush is lingual
and strokes are syllables
which make the verse visible
but most will never see it
due t'human being's narrow credence
They pledge allegiance
t'anything for financial reasons
Greed is the evil
and if all men are equal
Why are there homeless people
while others buy million dollar vehicles ?
There's no balance
when I'm battlin' you, there's no challenge
You're a mouse and I'm a Golden Eagle with gold talons
soaring in a thermal updraft
among sun shafts
through Russian winds that gust past
like the Tunguska blast
I cause a giant shockwave
that cracks the Rushmore rock face
and seperates Lincoln from the ones that copped slaves
Most presidents are puppets
entertainin' the public
There's always someone else above 'em
who instructs 'em

360 wrote:My rhymes are like black magic
ancient poems on cracked tablets
or Black Sabbath
trippin' on tabs of acid
My rap is visual
so the paint brush is lingual
and strokes are syllables
which make the verse visible
but most will never see it
due t'human being's narrow credence
They pledge allegiance
t'anything for financial reasons
Greed is the evil
and if all men are equal
Why are there homeless people
while others buy million dollar vehicles ?
There's no balance
when I'm battlin' you, there's no challenge
You're a mouse and I'm a Golden Eagle with gold talons
soaring in a thermal updraft
among sun shafts
through Russian winds that gust past
like the Tunguska blast
I cause a giant shockwave
that cracks the Rushmore rock face
and seperates Lincoln from the ones that copped slaves
Most presidents are puppets
entertainin' the public
There's always someone else above 'em
who instructs 'em

Real nice, the beginning and the end were the best parts for me. I can see an influence of Canibus in your style. I'd be shocked if I was incorrect.

Keep up the good work.

I want to see more from you. Leave feedback on others pieces if you want to get some in return.

Uppin.

Dude's got a lot of potential here folks. I'd like to see more from you 360. Nice vocab and word play. Get active my man.

complexity wrote: Real nice, the beginning and the end were the best parts for me. I can see an influence of Canibus in your style. I'd be shocked if I was incorrect.

Keep up the good work.

I want to see more from you. Leave feedback on others pieces if you want to get some in return.

Uppin.

You're right about the influence, but I don't try to write like him.

I appreciate the words.

-- Wed Dec 23, 2009 3:36 pm --

Riggz wrote:Dude's got a lot of potential here folks. I'd like to see more from you 360. Nice vocab and word play. Get active my man.

Thank you

due t'human being's narrow credence
They pledge allegiance
t'anything for financial reasons
Greed is the evil
and if all men are equal
Why are there homeless people
^^^^^^^^^^that right there was dope
I'm feelin' this...I'm suprised I missed this piece
a hidden gem if I do say so myself
now get some more work in!!!!!! NOW

I cause a giant shockwave
that cracks the Rushmore rock face
and seperates Lincoln from the ones that copped slaves


Holy shit ..


Keep droppin yo. Dope Piece lmao