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its like i'm destined to sweat til i rest in the dirt/
so its my quest to invest every breath in my work/
til perfection's observed in every session and verse/
and no one questions the worth of my collection of words/
reflect and immerse in the lessons i've learned/
so if my direction gets worse, my next step is reversed/
with each blessin and curse, the earth is testin my nerves/
til my patience is stretched like the neck of a shirt/
they say death is a flirt, a red dress and a smirk/
so if addressed, its probably best you avert/
i thought i'd never obsess over the ventures i've made/
but try measuring success without a cent to yer name/
no pennies in the jar, no cash in the safe/
the pursuit of happiness is not a passionate chase/
i'm just an average enslaved kid attracted to wages/
but the world laughs in yer face when you ask where yer raise is/

with each blessin and curse, the earth is testin my nerves/
til my patience is stretched like the neck of a shirt/
they say death is a flirt, a red dress and a smirk/
^^^^That was dope

I really liked this got a dope vibe
multi's were off the chain flow was on point
the vibe of the content was dope, keep writing!

this was nice lyrics were raw on this peice man great job!

mayne this was nice ish great flow and the multies were used well

so if my direction gets worse, my next step is reversed/
with each blessin and curse, the earth is testin my nerves/
til my patience is stretched like the neck of a shirt/
they say death is a flirt, a red dress and a smirk/

mayne this is dope i'm not amazed plex it inspired but you keep this shit comin

Damn it, I hate you for making every 3rd word flow so fluidly!
Talented ass fuker U!

--just another Ruckus fan--

Fuck. This was perfect from start to end. You switched up the rhyme scheme at the exact right time.

I thought you were human for a minute with a semi-weak verse, relatively speaking, of course not.

Exceptional man. I feel like you're just fucking with me, when you give me good feedback, because this shit is on another level.

yo you always deliver with a level of consistency this is really nice man, the one thing that always stands out to me is how smoothe ur shit is, keep writin peace out man

I've always liked your writing style, and I thought this piece was very well done. Seemed like it was probably a keystyle, and the multies were on point, flow was great and it was just an all around nice piece. Keep it up.

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Yo Ruck, I'm just checkin' out some of your older drops, since I was such a fan of your one more recent drop I had the chance to peep. You've got some serious flow-ability in your writtens man, I'm really interested in hearing you spit something audio whenever you get a chance to get yourself a computer and some basic recording essentials. You have a way to make the words just dance, with a flawless rhythm that just oozes to be put to a beat. I'm not even listening to any music at the moment, but when I read this I sure feel like I am.

IntrinsicCadence wrote:Yo Ruck, I'm just checkin' out some of your older drops, since I was such a fan of your one more recent drop I had the chance to peep. You've got some serious flow-ability in your writtens man, I'm really interested in hearing you spit something audio whenever you get a chance to get yourself a computer and some basic recording essentials. You have a way to make the words just dance, with a flawless rhythm that just oozes to be put to a beat. I'm not even listening to any music at the moment, but when I read this I sure feel like I am.

He's pretty good. You wait.

its like i'm destined to sweat til i rest in the dirt/
so its my quest to invest every breath in my work/
til perfection's observed in every session and verse/
and no one questions the worth of my collection of words/
reflect and immerse in the lessons i've learned/
so if my direction gets worse, my next step is reversed/
with each blessin and curse, the earth is testin my nerves/
til my patience is stretched like the neck of a shirt/

Fucking sick opener, no doubt. I expected it to be longer though, and once I started reading it, I really wished it had been longer. Your flow and spinning of internal rhymes is sick fam. Plain and simple. How you deliver your message without forcing lines is great as well. Always enjoy reading your stuff. Maybe we can get on a collab one day or something. Keep dropping heat on em. One.