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The rooms jam packed and spinnin' into a porno film
there's too much ass packed in and I'm rhetorical
askin' shorty do you do that shit like it's portable
took her to the uni-sex she threw up in a urinal
funny what the world do when beauty is all in ur own view
it's a euro-trip and she can't control what she can't hold
so she can't flow like she does when the drinks in she camp lo
but he can't know so in my mind I'm like Jack with these candles
I jump the flame then hit her with that there puncture pain
somethin' shuns the brain like a idiot that just loves to play
but this ain't incest for your interest it's invest in a internet
or a inter net where she can tight rope her hair n enter it
I swore I'd never hit if a chick let loose in her head
but I was like oh well I can't let that go well or go tell
so fell her body and I'm starin' at her like a active goon
love ain't applicable and head game is just like a panic room
but you know what havoc do it mob's deep and channels view
like damn it you, look so good I wouldn't mind having you
your state altered offa few drinks now I offer you drinks
thinkin' I oughta do this to get away from that inaudible bitch
and that's awful it's like Tom I cruise or my space is impossible

I was bored and listenin' to that Joe Budden/Gnarls Barkley Crazy remix

Some nice multies, punches hit or miss. Rhyme structure was off a few times but the flow was there. I'll give it a C+/B- for originality.

Not bad, seen better from ya QZ