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I'm tryna figure life out no reflex
just reflects the anemic type pretext
he next mentality, visual of c-sects
break out, breakin' down like D-gest
or digest the reader of the palms tree
the veiny retreat that equally arms me
spit calmly in a cypher filled with lost dreams
army of death body n breath hardly connect
sorry I'm stressed feeling so gaudy to text...
if you don't get the message then its goin' well
locked in, no cell, no will to fight, oh well
so I hit the bricks just like Joell
dedicated to Hip Hop like a faded mural
a backpacker, MC, walkin' in a hated world

just a lil' somethin' I lost my focus LoL

qwarterzone wrote:I'm tryna figure life out no reflex
just reflects the anemic type pretext
he next mentality, visual of c-sects
break out, breakin' down like D-gest
or digest the reader of the palms tree
the veiny retreat that equally arms me
spit calmly in a cypher filled with lost dreams
army of death body n breath hardly connect
sorry I'm stressed feeling so gaudy to text...
if you don't get the message then its goin' well
locked in, no cell, no will to fight, oh well
so I hit the bricks just like Joell
dedicated to Hip Hop like a faded mural
a backpacker, MC, walkin' in a hated world

just a lil' somethin' I lost my focus LoL

The middle part of the verse was by far the strongest. The vocabulary was pretty decent. You had some concepts, the transitions were nice. I don't know what was missing really, maybe just emotion and punch, whether that is literally with a punchline or just some very inpactful lines.