Menace vs J Haze

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Menace vs J Haze

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Due in 36 hours...
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yea im almost ready to drop when is this due? i know it says 36 hours but i think its been longer



im droppin in like 20 min-half hour



cmon now people
if were talkin the illest, dont compare me to this bitch
this battles a workout commercial and i 'swear you will get ripped'
you can only win by dickrydin' so let em go and check for you
common sense, any dudes who like 'men' are homosexual
bring aggression and rage i extend the weapon and spray
a track called renegade is the ONLY time M is better than J
ill give you a tip real quick before i target ya chest
the reason you cant take any prisoners, ya bars are too strected
make em not wanna drop, he see me spittin smoothe and im wreckless
so now he cant even finish his lines like he loosin at tetris
i explode and erase yo take this blow to the face
youd think we all signed out, i leave em so lo in the ranks
we battled once before but thats the past ya see...
i stay handin you L's yet i never pass my weed
my whole verse was half ass so i will put it simply
you only known for sucking dick, monica lewenski
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This Cat is bout to get skinned before he can flinch or even respond to this Diss..
Put Haze in the air as fog or a mist He was only "Slammin" when Pogs where the shit!!..**
No Dope lines are ever Dropped in ya post N on ya Road to the ritches imma make ya Stop in the Road..
Punches stay Rockin this Hoax leavin him speechless like a whore that adores havin cock lodged in her throat!!..
Yea youngin im gunnin to take over any stocks that your fundin while dumpin leavin ya career Extorted..
And when it comes to your rhymes keep in mind The wealhiest vets couldn't care to afforded it!!..
So Keep ya lil ego draw closed and throw the key in a place never Opened or Observed..
Your dope? is obserd! knock ya hopes in tha dirt cause ya punches are like throwin stones at the earth!!..
Not damaging ah thing Nor leavin any dents on tha surface on tha streets ya tense N all nervous..
Wat ComeBack? Ya Revenge is uncertain i hold weight benchin ya verses shit happens Put Depends on this person!!..
Drownin in ya own tears knowin that its so clear that your gettin removed from the circle..
While i chew and deperse you answerin rumors ill hurt you how does it feel to lose at rehearsal?!?!..
All kno this punk isn't trusted anything new you touch turns into rusted dont release much wen ya bustin..
Fuck tha happy days imma let illest see me "flattin Haze" like wen baggin up squezzin tight from the suction!!..**
No chance of savin face talkin reckless get ya tounge cut from beef now ya cant get a taste of fame..
Trin hard but you cant get "over on me" in trainin like that fat kid N that wall back in major payne!!..
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J-haze
1st bar -made me think of P90x or BoFlex, i liked that line

2nd bar-I do grow wiery of the "Men" metaphores" but it fit the flow well

3rd bar- haha Jay-Z and Eminem on the Renegade Track of Blueprint ... nice

4th bar-Killer bar and so true about Menace LOL, absolutely ill

5th bar-HA.. good one

6th bar-could've used a better metaphore for Low in the ranks like a deck of cards or something.. but nice try

7th -nice line

8th-sucking dick/monica lewenski a bit played and could've worded it differntly

Overall 8/10

Menace
1st bar- I got the reference, just didn't like the multis here

2nd bar- unfortunately this made me think of J's streched bar line..

3rd - didn't like the "couldn't care to afforded it" part, sounded forced

4th - filler to get to the next line

5th - I hold weight benchin ya verses, i liked that part of the verse, if you could've ended it there would've been a hot line.

6th - "lose at rehearsal"? - no Menace

7th -"Happy days" part was a filler

Closer - I understood the metaphore, just wasn't worded well.

5/10 (5 only because I know you can spit better than you write)

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if were talkin the illest, dont compare me to this bitch
this battles a workout commercial and i 'swear you will get ripped'

nice i liked this line

you can only win by dickrydin' so let em go and check for you
common sense, any dudes who like 'men' are homosexual

bit forced but not bad

bring aggression and rage i extend the weapon and spray
a track called renegade is the ONLY time M is better than J

i think em is better, nether the less this is saying at one point he's better than u so...

ill give you a tip real quick before i target ya chest
the reason you cant take any prisoners, ya bars are too strected

bars-prison quite played really but u flipped it nicely

make em not wanna drop, he see me spittin smoothe and im wreckless
so now he cant even finish his lines like he loosin at tetris

this was my fav bar for def

i explode and erase yo take this blow to the face
youd think we all signed out, i leave em so lo in the ranks

rhyming was poor, didnt like the bar

we battled once before but thats the past ya see...
i stay handin you L's yet i never pass my weed

nice line

my whole verse was half ass so i will put it simply
you only known for sucking dick, monica lewenski

this ruined ur verse for me, ur saying ur verse was bad and the monica lewinski is a bad line imo

over all the flow was nice and the punches were fairly effective, could of cum harder if u altered some parts to make it harder hitting



wow ur bars are stretched

This Cat is bout to get skinned before he can flinch or even respond to this Diss..
Put Haze in the air as fog or a mist He was only "Slammin" when Pogs where the shit!!..**

nice opener

No Dope lines are ever Dropped in ya post N on ya Road to the ritches imma make ya Stop in the Road..
Punches stay Rockin this Hoax leavin him speechless like a whore that adores havin cock lodged in her throat!!..

said road twice, dunno if jus me but i despise repetition of the same word no matter how its used
the punch was weak aswell

Yea youngin im gunnin to take over any stocks that your fundin while dumpin leavin ya career Extorted..
And when it comes to your rhymes keep in mind The wealhiest vets couldn't care to afforded it!!..

meh no real hard punch here

So Keep ya lil ego draw closed and throw the key in a place never Opened or Observed..
Your dope? is obserd! knock ya hopes in tha dirt cause ya punches are like throwin stones at the earth!!..

the multis in this bar were nang, the whole bar worked for me the punch itself wasnt hard hitting but the combination of the multis flow etc, props man really liked this bar

Not damaging ah thing Nor leavin any dents on tha surface on tha streets ya tense N all nervous..
Wat ComeBack? Ya Revenge is uncertain i hold weight benchin ya verses shit happens Put Depends on this person!!..

no punch, flow n multis were nice still

Drownin in ya own tears knowin that its so clear that your gettin removed from the circle..
While i chew and deperse you answerin rumors ill hurt you how does it feel to lose at rehearsal?!?!..

this aint a rehersal...so wtf come on man concentrate less on these multis and more on tearing the guy a new one

All kno this punk isn't trusted anything new you touch turns into rusted dont release much wen ya bustin..
Fuck tha happy days imma let illest see me "flattin Haze" like wen baggin up squezzin tight from the suction!!..**

i see wer ur goin with this but evry1 is referecin haze to weed, this could have been more effective i jus didnt like the wording personally

No chance of savin face talkin reckless get ya tounge cut from beef now ya cant get a taste of fame..
Trin hard but you cant get "over on me" in trainin like that fat kid N that wall back in major payne!!..

the wording here is poor, its a real nice punch but poor wording which jus takes all impact from the bar

overall u came nice fam but ur wording really let u down i felt, jus needed to be shorter and punchier in my opinion

i really dont know which way to call this i preferred j's flow and punches
i liked mens multis and originality
i wanna say a draw but i really think j just edged it so
vote j
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uppin cmon this shit has been up forever
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I'm going to have to vote for J Haze too. That is really a surprise victory, but that ripped line, the stretched line, renegade line, they all added up to a very strong personal verse while Menace was brilliant in the wordplay/nameplay category as always, he fell a bit short in the strong personals and flow, and a few of his bars weren't worded as well as they could have been.

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