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Some of my rhymes tend to be in the mafioso rap genre, so I decided to show you guys some of the stuff I write in that area. Main inspired by guys like Raekwon, Jay-Z, Wu-tang Clan etc... Anyways this is suppose to be the intro to my mixtape called Side Effects.

House of Flying Bullets

Goes to the beat of http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kFC41EeF ... re=related

You better get that money, no matter, what you do
You gotta get that money, and represent your crew
And keep it true

I lick shots like a mobster boss
But for a cause, cause I never take a loss
This is Side Effects though so you dont press pause
All you do is press play...listen...and then applause
I chocked out the mic already
Gaspin for air, shits thin and I'm breathin heavy
Bout bust open like a Louisiana levy
And I know this game aint really ready
And I be on point with my gun held steady
Bout to massacre your entrouage at the getti
Cause my aim be on point like a harpoon
And I know your ears blow when the mic go boom
First mixtape droppin comin at ya soon
Stayin stuck in your brain your very favorite tune
Yo my name is Mr. Prime, king of the crime
Cause I can bust a skull and a mic at the same time
Bitch I'll never tarnish and I'll always shine
Cause I stepped into the lemon not the lime

You better get that money, no matter, what you do
You gotta get that money, and represent your crew
And keep it true

My fresh kicks and gear be ready no doubt
Performing great shows cause my concerts be sold out
And I got people questionin why I keep at it
Why? Cause my rhymes be some kind of static
Like Frank White I'm Mr. John Gotti
Got an emcee askin who shot me
Well I did kid, cause I be a mobster man
Got me yellin at the cops catch me if ya can!
And if you can't thats alright you can always try again
Just don't think we'll ever become friends
Cause I run my block with force and assertively
The main reason bangers wanna come and murder me
Too bad though nigga my house be filled with gats
While others got houses filled with roaches and rats
This is house of flyin bullets so you betta come equipt
Cause everyone know my Bullets be hallow point legit

We soldiers, boy, we soldiers
Bake cakes, hundred dollar bill holders
We soldiers, boy, we soldiers
Bighead, I thought I told ya
We soldiers, boy, we soldiers
Bake cakes, hundred dollar bill holders
Bighead, I thought I told ya
We soldiers, boy, we soldiers

You better get that money, no matter, what you do
You gotta get that money, and represent your crew
And keep it true

*moved*

prime uve gotta have a good look at the cypher section to understand how it works here

oh, sorry I accidently put it there I know the difference between cypher and scripture sorry about that.

not bad dude, itd be a decent audio, the rhymes are a little sparse, so ud have to count on a good beat n youre flow would have to be able to carry it along, interesting script

it was aight it started out nice than the flow and personality in ur bars kinda fell off in my opinion

When did the flow and bars start to fall off?

im sorry if my feedback is repetitive but i feel the same way about this as the other drop of yours, you have a lot potential and you have the flow down which imo is most important, so youve figured the big part now u just need to work a lil on multies and rhyme schemes, but good shit either way man keep writin your stuff is good the way it is and im sure youll start improving quick

I agree with killa on this one..

Not bad tho homie. Keep Em Comin.