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Better then that New Song

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check it out

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You are that Teen Hit Boy Band type of singer man.
You got some talent.. Got some growing to still do. But you doing good man. You sing really soft.. like no emotions man. Feel waht you are singing and dont sing anything that aint part of you.
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lyrics were dope man... i can see u as one of those kids gettin signed by lil wayne or somethin... hook was cool just the way it was sung was off key (imo) but either way dude really deep song... enjoyed the listen keep it up man keep droppin

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how would you catch the attention of big artist like lil wayne
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babyrec wrote:how would you catch the attention of big artist like lil wayne

shoot him

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Viral wrote:
babyrec wrote:how would you catch the attention of big artist like lil wayne

shoot him

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In My Most Honest Opinion The Whole Concept Was Dope, But Everything Else Seemed Amateurish, The Rhyme Scheme, The Production, And The Vocals I Felt That A Lot Of Emotion Was Held Back, Not Sayin That There Wasn't Any, But Not Strong Enough To Catch The Ear Of Uhh...Let's Just Say Wayne (Sorry To Disagree But Imo). Push Harder, It Was Definitely A Dope Concept, But With A Subject So Deep You Wanna Make Sure That You Come Correct. I Think Someone Already Mentioned The Hook Part, And Yeah It Is Off Key, And I Hope That's A Girl Singin And Not You. You Got Some Really Good Feed Here, Can't Wait To See What You Do With It, Until You Drop Agian, Peace I'm Out.
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ya its a girl

she was supposed to come rerecord when she was less nervous in a studio cuz it was her first time

but i got tired of waiting
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You have a long time man. If you're trying to get a deal before your voice breaks, you're going to need to really get to pushing your music everywhere and record like 24/7 because even though you're pretty good for what you do, you definitely don't stand out, and like "Petrafyne" said the tracks do come off amateurish.

You would have a real hard time making it. By the way, if your voice has already broke, I'm sorry!

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complexity wrote:
You would have a real hard time making it. By the way, if your voice has already broke, I'm sorry!

it has
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babyrec wrote:
complexity wrote:
You would have a real hard time making it. By the way, if your voice has already broke, I'm sorry!

it has
god kinda fucked you over then kiddo damn

but yeah, what everybody else has been saying in the last few posts has been on point, the production mixing etc. needs work, your flow was choppy and off at parts, girl on the hook was offkey, need to figure out a delivery and flow that works for you and find a rapping comfort zone cause you don't really sound too comfortable and confident on the track
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There's not much more I can add that hasn't already been said by Petra & Complexity.

You're young kid...you have all the time in the world right now to perfect your craft. All you have to do is keep writing, recording and pushing your name out there. Come up with original concepts and be yourself at all times. I doubt you're voice has dropped yet, there's no way your vocals can be that soft. (especially when you look to be about 13 yrs old lol)

Just keep doing your thang, keep practicing, and try to come off with something more complex. (both lyrically and execution wise) Based off that one song...I wouldn't even consider signing you. (no offense) And as for the hook...nervous or not, that girl sang wayyyy off key! Let her know that the 2 of you can remain friends...but she's not allowed on any songs anymore! lol
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lol kurse...too funny....honestly...i listened to this and said.....wtf?....y did i say that?...cuz...well...it didnt seem like there was any effort wat so ever put into this....ur voice def has potential..that girl...needs lessons tho...haha...keep doin u tho...dont know how young u r but u got a loooonnnggg way to go
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