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i got my drop ready lol so whenever ur ready to murk me let me know ha

Pre-writtens huh...lol





Listen!


Take time and practice infact sit and dwell on ya Actions..
Fuck passion in a nut shell ya WACK and i see ya Shell Crackin!!..

Wit no defense mechanism no reps givin to this soft hearted Contender..
Your all garbage remember! Can't go strong when ya only as hard as a Placenta!!..

Far from hot ya dont even seem mild should change ya name to "Docile"..
Ya pen Got Miles? never spittin crack! In my layer your isaiah juss another Rock Child!!..

So pay hommage and save ya fake jots bitch i'll show ya a Way To End This..
Your a Waste to Mention to "niggaz" round here kinda like a Racist Guest List!!..


Off the top by the way...

you're a menace to what? cuz it is definitely not society
im an evil spirit wit lyrics when i spit-it u feel-it like anxiety

ur career is home to a trash-can imma mad-man spraying lyrical guns like axe-cans
when i unleash the wrath-man i bring you & your crew a dark night like bat-man

quit your bluffin son this aint poker you takin more l's than a smoker
the scars on your face after this battle will have u mistaken for the joker

last bar must dead em never sweat em my bars leave blood on his fake denim
im a virulent virus violently spittin verses equivalent to snake's venom

-- Thu Aug 13, 2009 2:48 pm --

good shit nice drop

-MenaCe- wrote:Pre-writtens huh...lol





Listen!


Take time and practice infact sit and dwell on ya Actions..
Fuck passion in a nut shell ya WACK and i see ya Shell Crackin!!..
.5
Wit no defense mechanism no reps givin to this soft hearted Contender..
Your all garbage remember! Can't go strong when ya only as hard as a Placenta!!..
.5
Far from hot ya dont even seem mild should change ya name to "Docile"..
Ya pen Got Miles? never spittin crack! In my layer your isaiah juss another Rock Child!!..
.5
So pay hommage and save ya fake jots bitch i'll show ya a Way To End This..
Your a Waste to Mention to "niggaz" round here kinda like a Racist Guest List!!..
1

Off the top by the way...

2.5

zeezy316 wrote:you're a menace to what? cuz it is definitely not society
im an evil spirit wit lyrics when i spit-it u feel-it like anxiety
.5
ur career is home to a trash-can imma mad-man spraying lyrical guns like axe-cans
when i unleash the wrath-man i bring you & your crew a dark night like bat-man
.5
quit your bluffin son this aint poker you takin more l's than a smoker
the scars on your face after this battle will have u mistaken for the joker
.5
last bar must dead em never sweat em my bars leave blood on his fake denim
im a virulent virus violently spittin verses equivalent to snake's venom
.5

2

Menace - 2.5
Zeezy - 2

Wierd breakdown but watever..

1-0 up!

-MenaCe- wrote:Wierd breakdown but watever..

1-0 up!

A .5 is a bar that doesn't hit all that hard and a 1 is a bar that does

no dought try to use breakdowns next time tho much easier..good look for tha vote anyways..

vote- menace nuff said

you got some work zeezy but you will improve menace ive seen you come harder but you got it done

cat sweep to my boi menace

3-0

Take time and practice infact sit and dwell on ya Actions..
Fuck passion in a nut shell ya WACK and i see ya Shell Crackin!!..

aha lol Nice 8/10

Wit no defense mechanism no reps givin to this soft hearted Contender..
Your all garbage remember! Can't go strong when ya only as hard as a Placenta!!..

lol, not very strong tho 5/10

Far from hot ya dont even seem mild should change ya name to "Docile"..
Ya pen Got Miles? never spittin crack! In my layer your isaiah juss another Rock Child!!..

Decent 6/10

So pay hommage and save ya fake jots bitch i'll show ya a Way To End This..
Your a Waste to Mention to "niggaz" round here kinda like a Racist Guest List!!...

HAHA nice, 9/10





you're a menace to what? cuz it is definitely not society
im an evil spirit wit lyrics when i spit-it u feel-it like anxiety

liked the flow, meh average bar 5/10

ur career is home to a trash-can imma mad-man spraying lyrical guns like axe-cans
when i unleash the wrath-man i bring you & your crew a dark night like bat-man

used man 3 times there...Liked the flow again, but overall weak! 4/10

quit your bluffin son this aint poker you takin more l's than a smoker
the scars on your face after this battle will have u mistaken for the joker

meh, 6/10

last bar must dead em never sweat em my bars leave blood on his fake denim
im a virulent virus violently spittin verses equivalent to snake's venom

Nice wordplay...but no punch! hmm

3/10.



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Menace got this!!

4-0 KO!

Close This...

Good Shyt Zeezy

4-0 KO Menace -Closed n Updated-