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$.@MB!T!0N.$ wrote:

Never More Motivated Underrated Tryna Get Overrated...
9 Ta 5's Wont Get Chu Far On The 95..Starting Grindin Live
Like The Clipse,Its Time To Dive Off The Board So Canines
Dont Get The Slightest Sniff..Aint Slanging Drugs But The
Flows So Potent..Na That Ain a Muffla You Know Wuts Smokin..
I Aint Got Energy 4 Joe Shmoes Boasting
But i Can Treat Um Like Each Ocean The Way My Foes Go Coastin

Slick

Yall Histeric These Boy's Is Slick..Keep It Like That Why
Get Another Rapper In The Pic..I'd Enjoy Ta Spit
Turn Into Pink Floyd With Trips N Go Down on a Chick On My
Voyage Ship, I'm Still Standin On My Loiter Tip..
You Can't Stand Me Cus Your Understandin Of Me is Destroyed 2 Bits
But i'm About To TAKE OFF! Like Void The Shit...

Alright

I Got No Willz But God Willin..i'm Gunna Without a Travel For Religion
I Free These Bars To Avoid a Battle With The Prison..

I liked this line

This Country's is So Fucked.Society Be Sad,The Shit is Getting Me Mad
I'm Just Lookin 4 a Shot Like Alcohalics Outa Rehab

Dope Wordplay

Wallet Full Of Weed Bags..It's Green But Not Green Cash..
It's Forced On Me..N If i Get Bagged
i Gotta Fuck a Teacher To Get a Free Pass..But Naaah
I Aint Snitching So I Gotta Live With My Desicion But Still

Decent

Transition Like Whippin.. I Know The Outcome Of My Actions
Still I'm Acting Like Malcom's Reaction To Attacking... Yes..
I'm Overaggressive Overobsessive..I Need To Make It N Get Over This Headike
Send Over a Message To Every Dood With a Rover Or Lexus
Go A Lane Over i'm Next Kid!! Rolling My Mindstate Sober N Wreckless...

I particularly liked the "overaggressive, over obsessive"

But When I'm High I'm Calm..Tryna Figure out Which Cloud in The Sky I'm On

Nice

My Goals R Movin You Know i Keep it Kickin Like Healthy Pregnant Chick
No Days Off We Gunna Pursue This Shit & Start Gettin Chips
Your Like Sunday Morning Flowers.. All You Do is Sit...

Hmm, would have liked a better ending bar.

Nice drop man!

this was pretty good. your writtens definitly seem more focused than they used to be.

there was several clever lines


I Free These Bars To Avoid a Battle With The Prison..
This Country's is So Fucked.Society Be Sad,The Shit is Getting Me Mad
I'm Just Lookin 4 a Shot Like Alcohalics Outa Rehab


i can definitly see the Joe Budden influence in your writing. I mean that in a good way. the whole thing was solid with the odd bit of dopeness. no real complaints. the flow, multis ...etc were cool. nothing seemed forced. overall i liked it

Same Style You've Always Had But You've Moulded it Up Nicely. Definitely Unique. The Flow Stood Out The Most But i Also Liked The insight into ur Mindstate. Just The Right Amount Of Similes And imagery To Paint a Clearer Picture And u Didn't Overdo it So it's a Well Balanced Drop. Flow And Multis Were Definitely Off The Hook Though.

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9 Ta 5's Wont Get Chu Far On The 95..Starting Grindin Live

I Got No Willz But God Willin..i'm Gunna Without a Travel For Religion
I Free These Bars To Avoid a Battle With The Prison..

But When I'm High I'm Calm..Tryna Figure out Which Cloud in The Sky I'm On

Good Shit Keep it Up.

I'm Just Lookin 4 a Shot Like Alcohalics Outa Rehab
Wallet Full Of Weed Bags..It's Green But Not Green Cash

nice one! never read anything from u before, and with memories of the quality shown by the people in this section the last time i checked in, i kinda didn't expect anything. couldn't been more wrong. like cee4 said, it had a flow that reminds you of joe budden - and that's good, that your developing your own style of writing. at the beginning i didn't quite catch the flow, but that changed as soon as i got a lil deeper into the verse - and i gotta admit, shit is goood! you brought every element of writing into it, wordplay, multies, great similies. i enjoyed reading it .. so i'ma be lookin for more!

Its Hazard ..

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